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Tamma
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0 posted 2001-07-26 05:50 PM


This was written about my cousin, who has been having a rough tyme lately. She was recently put in the physciatic(sp?) ward, because of all of this *sigh*

~*~ Bruises Unknown ~*~

Bruises unknown, hidden
Brought on by herself
An arm is bandaged
To hide the wounds
From a sharpened fork
The crimson flowed
From a stubbed toe
An accident, she said
Be they know better
A blistered arm
From a light bulb
In the lamp upstairs
Everyone’s getting worried
The bruises are getting bigger
The wounds are getting deeper
Bruises unknown, hidden
Caused by depression.

"A friend's shoulder makes a
nice pillow when you're crying" ~Me
"If beauty is in the eye of the beholder, I guess love is too" ~Me

© Copyright 2001 Tamma M. Wilson - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-07-26 06:24 PM


This was a wonderful poem. Self inflicted pain is one of the symptoms of someone wanting to commit suicide. I'm glad they're getting some help.

-Kosetsu

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2 posted 2001-07-26 06:29 PM


quite powerful...and the last verse...hit me...i liked the poem...bye Tamma

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3 posted 2001-07-26 06:38 PM


emotionally powerful poem Tamma.....well done  
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4 posted 2001-07-26 07:26 PM


I read this when you were asking permision to post it first in the DM forum and I'll tell you this....This poem is very moving.  You did really good on this one.

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5 posted 2001-07-26 08:14 PM


Tamma - I liked this a lot. I am so glad that she is getting help. This happens way too much, and the sad fact is that it goes unnoticed. You did very well on this piece.  

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

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6 posted 2001-07-26 08:39 PM


very powerful and direct   i hope things get better for your cousin
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7 posted 2001-07-27 01:00 AM


Tamma, this was nice.
Depression is a serious " disease" if you will, and this shows the danger of it.

You did great showing how serious it really is!!
Loved it!

~Jeff~

"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."



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8 posted 2001-07-27 01:08 AM


Quite the poem. Really shows me just how far depressed people can be. You expressed yourself well.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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9 posted 2001-07-27 05:21 AM


very powerful tamma...you did a good job on this...i hope your cousin gets better soon..

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Send a smile over to you"
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10 posted 2001-07-28 11:51 AM


Going that far down sucks. It's a horrible stage to be at. My thoughts go out to your cousin. I hope she is doing better now.
This is one of my favourite pieces from you Tamma because it shows the seriousness of this situation. The reality of it more like it. You can't escape this because it is everwhere 24/7.
Thanks for sharing this.  

~AF~

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11 posted 2001-07-28 01:44 PM


Hey,

   Yes, self-inflicted pain or self-mutilation can be a warring sign of suicide. But more often than not self-mutilation is not a sign someone wished to commit suicide. It’s something a person does to relief stress or such things as that. In some cases it’s a way of the person telling him or herself he or she has power over him or herself. Self-mutilation is a bad habit and I say habit because you can’t just stop. I am glad your cousin is getting help. The poem itself was okay, but wasn’t your best. Until your next poem

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12 posted 2001-07-28 05:58 PM


Oh wow.. this is very moving.. I hope your cousin gets all the help she can. But great poem!  

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

I'm a nobody, nobody is perfect, therefore I'm perfect.

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13 posted 2001-08-03 09:32 PM


Ditto to every single thing that Linc said.  He knows what he's talking about it.  He's seen it.. This is a very moving piece Tamma.  I'm glad your cousin is getting help.  I like the way you described the seriousness of the situation.  This is one of your best.. Thanks for sharing, I really enjoyed this.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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