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Valley of fears#12 |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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This was inspired by the poem "when death comes" by Mary Oliver. It was given to me at the end of the school year by my mentor. Hope you are reading this ms. banks. Its also for a couple of ppl in this poetry forum. "WHEN DEATH COMES" When the door of darkness opens will I be able to sink away with no regrets? Shall I be able to say I've lived life to its fullest or Will I perish into the darkness without the joy of saying I've led a good life I will want to stay I will fight, If I cant say goodbye without regrets you might as well kill me When its over I want to say Ive climbed the highest mountain surpassed all my doubts will my story say that I've fought the bear or will it say I jumped off the bridge? Will my children say I was the disgrace of my family the loony one, will my love stay true? or will he say, "forget her" I do not know the whole world yet but I hope that someday my storm clouds will clear Just the thought of my death brings me onto my knees begging for immortality To those i thank you for saving me for an early death "I dont want to end up simply having visited this world" Regina If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
"I dont want to end up simply having visited this world" awesome...wow...home hitting piece...loved this one...enjoyed greatly...bye Ina  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I'm guessing the last part was from the poem that inspired you. If so, i think you should have put yer own little thing at the end. The whole poem is yers, might as well end it yours. If you wrote that, then awesome job. I really liked the poem as a whole. i thought you did wonderfully on this one Regi. Well done!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
one word.. marvelous. ~Jeff~ |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
Ina ~ I enjoyed this very much  Exellent write! |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
When its over I want to say Ive climbed the highest mountain surpassed all my doubts regi....this is awesome as are all your poems!!! *appluds*..oh hang on  ...<~~~ there you go!!!loved this one as well! "I hope my mum and I hope my dad |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Jeez Regi! You sure know how to hit a person hard. It's good that someone saved you from an early death because not everyone has that..... Thanks for the read. It can go into the library with the rest of your series. ~AF~ "Reality is just a crutch for people who can't cope with drugs." -- Robin Williams |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
With each piece of work in this series, I am more and more amazed... absolutely oustanding work you have here. THe ending was FANTASTIC, and to end it with the quote from the song I thought was a good way to end it, as that was the song that inspired you. Nicely done, indeed. All I can say about the content, is stay strong. Keep your head up, and you will one day say that you climbed the highest mountain, and lived to tell about it. Nicely done, Regi... I am VERY impressed! --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
The last lines hit hard I really can't say much I'm just out of words right now *applauds* hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Allysa, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Ma |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
great poem very well written. robin bye lizzy,javi,acire,cherish,SEA,vicky,laura,andrea,jessa and anyone else i forgot i will be back to torment you soon muhahahahahahaha |
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