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Punk Angel
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since 2001-07-25

Posts 66
Pennsylvania, US

0 posted 2001-07-26 02:06 PM

You laugh, you cry, you yell, you scream,
Everything feels like it's meant to be.

It's not that new boy, he's so overrated.
It's not that new toy your best friend created.

It's your life, it feels so complete,
You look around, and you like what you see.

You've finally found a meaning to what's around you.
Who has time anymore for feeling blue?

But you know that sometimes this feeling will pass,
You can see through it like a piece of glass.

You know that someday again you will be depressed,
That heavy feeling will be back on your chest.

But that's part of life, and everyone can see,
that this beautiful place was meant to be.

we love what is lost, but does what we lost love us back??

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

1 posted 2001-07-26 02:23 PM

Is this ine about your friend too?
I enjoyed the read.
Nicely done here.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-07-26 04:32 PM

Well done here Punk. I enjoyed the poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-07-26 06:35 PM

"But that's part of life, and everyone can see,
that this beautiful place was meant to be."

beautiful...i liked the poem...great job!...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Sabriel.s.h.lover
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since 2001-04-16

Posts 73
b.f.e. aka- Hickville

4 posted 2001-07-26 06:47 PM

nicely done.i really liked this one.

~sabriel

stupidity should be painful
all i wanted out of u , was for sumthing u could never be, now take a real good look at what u've done 2 me!!!!!~slipknot

allie
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since 2001-07-09

Posts 218
Australia

5 posted 2001-07-27 12:17 PM

I really enjoyed this,
Very nice

ALLIE

JBaker515

Member

since 2001-02-28

Posts 458
Dartmouth College

6 posted 2001-07-27 12:51 PM

this was great work, i enjoyed it.

I wasnt to sure of who you were writing it about..maybe i missed something..

Nice job though

~Jeff~

"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

7 posted 2001-07-27 05:39 AM

well done on this one...i liked the two lines thing that you did....good job!!

"Killer in me is a killer in you, my love
Send a smile over to you"
Disarm
Smashing Pumkins

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

8 posted 2001-07-28 12:00 PM

yes the couplets did add a nice effect. Some piece suit long stanzas and other only need a piece like this. Short and to the point, your words had a lot of truth in them.
"You know that someday again you will be depressed,
That heavy feeling will be back on your chest."
That part I really liked.

Great job.

~AF~

"Reality is just a crutch for people who can't cope with drugs." -- Robin Williams

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

9 posted 2001-07-28 12:12 PM

I liked this poem cuz it really added hope to the feeling of depression...nice job...i really liked it!

Linc

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

10 posted 2001-07-28 12:42 PM

Hey,

Don’t get me wrong because I like the poem, but I don’t think it’s your best. Although it is quite nice, I believe with a bit more time it could have been better. Until your next poem

-- Linc

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Jessica

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since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

11 posted 2001-07-29 09:47 PM

Very nice...

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

Love you, Adam!! :)

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

12 posted 2001-08-04 01:52 AM

THis is well written.. I like the way you wrote with couplets. Nicely done

I enjoyed this.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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