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Jessica

Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

0 posted 2001-07-25 10:56 PM

Lost and broken,
Twisted and used.
This is my life,
Worn and consumed.
Begging to feel,
Anything but hurt,
Searching to find,
Whatever may work.
Holding on tight,
To something I'm not sure of.
Not wanting to climb,
Fearing the height.

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

1 posted 2001-07-25 11:23 PM

Such imagery in this one Jess. You know I loved this one. But you aren't broken..or worn...or used. You are a beautiful, caring, incredible person. If the height grows too much...just know that I'll be right beneath you, ready to catch you should you slip and fall.

-Adam

"Love, like the Rose, is desired. And like the Rose, Love has its thorns." - Unknown

DarkAngelOfTheStars
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 255

2 posted 2001-07-25 11:25 PM

oh my i loved this so much! its going in my library. really great. I can relate so much to it!

story of my life: I am so self destructive, I turn solutions into problems. Everything i touch i ruin. Im midas in reverse

JBaker515

Member

since 2001-02-28

Posts 458
Dartmouth College

3 posted 2001-07-25 11:48 PM

This was great Jess, i loved it. Great flow, really good job. I think its the best ive seen from you. Keep it up girl!!

~Jeff~

"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-07-26 02:45 AM

Great job on this one Jess! I really liked this! Awesome job.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Punk Angel
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since 2001-07-25

Posts 66
Pennsylvania, US

5 posted 2001-07-26 02:16 PM

awesome job jess, i really like ur poetry, not just this one!!

we love what is lost, but does what we lost love us back??

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

6 posted 2001-07-31 12:02 PM

NICELY done, Jess. This poem is VERY powerful in it's simplicity. I really enjoyed this... the emotions are well written and portrayed. Awesome work... Just fantastic.

--Marie

Kevin

Senior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

7 posted 2001-07-31 02:20 PM

Dont fear the fall....think of everything you can see from way up there

i loved this metaphor

Jessica

Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

8 posted 2001-07-31 03:06 PM

Thanks for all of your replies...

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

Love you, Adam!! :)

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

9 posted 2001-07-31 10:07 PM

this piece..was powerful...the strong emotion of weary...i liked this poem a lot...cause this is where i am.

"...if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take..."

allis4angel
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since 2001-04-10

Posts 82
Portugal

10 posted 2001-08-03 05:16 PM

Nice, nice...

This part is... I don't know... perfect.

---
   Searching to find,
   Whatever may work.
   Holding on tight,
   To something I'm not sure of.
---

Thanks for sharing

chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

11 posted 2001-08-03 05:24 PM

Very simple yet to the point. And the flow was excellent. Short and...hmmm...sweet I suppose, in a different manner. And yet, your words were strong. Well done!

-Leah

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

Jessica

Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

12 posted 2001-08-04 04:02 AM

Thanks for all of your replies...

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