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TearsOfPearls
Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa

0 posted 2001-07-25 03:47 PM

How does it feel
to allow your tears
to wet your cheeks
that's been dry for years,
without holding back
to let them be free
and run from your eyes
too tired to see?

How does it feel
to wipe them dry
and not be angry
for heroes too cry,
to find that peace
inside you soul
that lets you know
even heroes fall?

How does it feel?
How does it feel...

Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice!

DarkenedShadow
Member

since 2001-07-23

Posts 114
Kansas

1 posted 2001-07-25 03:51 PM

How does it feel you ask, its almost a burning sensation for me. Its a relization of something maybe you don't want to know but its there. The words were there, the thought was there, thstrenght was there, this poem was there... /Nick/

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

2 posted 2001-07-25 03:57 PM

I really love this poem and I can't wait to read more.Keep up the awsome work!
Lauren

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-07-26 02:28 AM

I enjoyed thisone. I found the ending to be quite impacting. It hit me, nicely done on that.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2001-07-30 11:07 PM

I LOVED the message to this poem. I could really connect with the words, and the first stanza especially hit me hard. I loved the way you emphasized even heroes cry. very nicely done, TOP. The flow was excellent... The rhyme scheme was very well done until the last line of the second stanza.. the rhyme seemed to drop, but that's almost nothing. This is one of the best I've read from you.. I really liked this. Hit home pretty hard. Oh, and the title is misspelled

Having the word "hoe" there doesn't really add to the poem, sweetie

But it was an excellent read. Very nicely done, indeed!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

5 posted 2001-08-01 02:43 AM

i too...loved the meassage...very true...and nicely written...enjoyed this a lot.

"if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take" - when thugs cry-

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