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In a Patch of Window Fog
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In a Patch of Window Fog |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Blocks my view Fingers drawing little shapes In that clear glasslike hue. In that patch of window fog I see nothing but her face Smiling back across at me Across that endless space. I wipe away the window fog With my finger tips And still I see her shining face In the falling rain that drips. I stop and wonder… What does this mean? It means I love this woman, With the face I’ve never seen. "Love, like the Rose, is desired. And like the Rose, Love has its thorns." - Unknown |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
very descriptive and mysterious. i liked it. thanks for sharing  |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Nicely done. I agree that it was kinda mysterious. I like!!! |
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DarkenedShadow Member
since 2001-07-23
Posts 114Kansas |
I'm agreeing with Heavens Tears and Mistic, this one id mysterious. The fact that shes there to you and possible invisble to us makes it seem more visual... excellent work as always. /Nick/ |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Mysterious indeed. I liked it. It's like, the love of your life is out there, but she isn't in your life yet, but you know she will be. At least that's what I took from it. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Yeah Jon..that's kind of it. This'll sound a little cryptic...but I..-may- have found her. Thing is, I've never met her.. Like I said, kind of cryptic, but maybe you can figure out the meaning. -Kosetsu "Love, like the Rose, is desired. And like the Rose, Love has its thorns." - Unknown |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
Adam - We both know who this girl is... Maybe they will figure it out in time. I loved this... But you already knew that. *hugs* |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
If they read some of my other posts, then they know. Every word of these latest few poems is the truth. Just want you to know that, chica. Love ya *hugs* -Adam "Love, like the Rose, is desired. And like the Rose, Love has its thorns." - Unknown |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Oooo this is really good, Adam! The mystery element of it came through very strongly. It read like some 50's love movie. hehe... The flow was pretty good until the last stanza. The first two lines were out. Actually, the first line was. It read too short for the rest of the piece. Anyway, thanks for sharing this. It kicks ass. ~AF~ "Reality is just a crutch for people who can't cope with drugs." -- Robin Williams |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
ahhhh i love this...the images are sooo vivid...nicely done here kose....stay forever in love dude..it does wonders hahaha..  "Killer in me is a killer in you, my love |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
Wow... i really really liked this amazing!! ALLIE |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
AWESOME descriptions.. very nicely done, Adam. Your poetry is a pleasure to read.. you're a very talented writer, and your pieces as of late really show off that talent of yours. I really enjoyed this read.. very eery in a few places. Nicely done, indeed. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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