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Hallucination
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since 2001-03-18
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0 posted 2001-07-23 05:39 PM


There’s nothing to deny
This is truly a lie
Written all over your face.
Can read it in your eyes
There’s no reason to try
Because you can not hide it.

Why did you do what you did
Why do you think I will forgive ( you )
Why should I believe what you’ve told
Why should I merry and grow old ( with you )
When I can’t even put my trust in you.

Why did you break my heart
Moments from the start.
That you told me you loved me.
Can feel it in your touch
That you do not give much
Because you try to hide it.

Why did you do what you did
Why do you think I will forgive ( you )
Why should I believe what you’ve told
Why should I merry and grow old ( with you )
When I can’t even put my trust in you.

My heart is not to be played with
My soul is not your playground
My emotions are not to be turned on and off
As you wish just cause your feeling down

Why did you do what you did
Why do you think I will forgive ( you )
Why should I believe what you’ve told
Why should I merry and grow old ( with you )
When I can’t even put my trust in you.

Why did you do what you did
Why do you think I will forgive ( you )
Why should I believe what you’ve told
Why should I merry and grow old ( with you )
When I can’t even put my trust in you.


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Spice
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since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.
1 posted 2001-07-23 11:10 PM


Hallucination..wow. This is probably my fav. of your songs right now.
The meaning and strength portrayed in it is awesome.
The only thing that bothered the hell outta me was this: "Why should I merry and grow old ( with you ): Merry should be spelled MARRY. Merry means happy/jolly.
Nice write though. I liked it alot.

Shygirl82
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since 2001-02-19
Posts 245
Ilinois
2 posted 2001-07-24 02:41 AM


Oh WOW...ok I loved this one..it honestly brought me to tears because it really hit home with me.
"There’s nothing to deny
This is truly a lie
Written all over your face.
Can read it in your eyes
There’s no reason to try
Because you can not hide it"

This was just so good. I could feel the emotions in this.  Wow....thanks so much for sharing.
~Nikki~

It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them.

allie
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since 2001-07-09
Posts 218
Australia
3 posted 2001-07-24 04:55 AM


Awsome post.
Really related to this.
I'm really glad it's a song, which i only realsied when i read the replys... but i would have suggested making it a song if it werent...

Very very nice,

ALLIE

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4 posted 2001-07-24 04:58 AM


Nice song.....what kind of songs are these anyway? Poppy? Rock?
What?

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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Lynchburg, Virginia
5 posted 2001-07-28 07:50 PM


I'm interested in what the tune to this one is like... I was getting a slow-song feel to this one, but it seemed to long to be slow.
I enjoyed this!  It's a rough situation... all your songs have so much feeling in them.  Very nicely done.  I look forward to seeing more.. soon!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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