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LoveBug

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0 posted 2001-07-23 04:14 PM

The end of my writer's block!

It's not my best, but it's pretty meaningful. Thanks for reading.

(And I know I haven't been in here much, and I apologize! I'll show up more, I promice!)

The darkness seemed much darker then
Before that particular dawn
Some years can fly by in a second’s time
But those seconds seemed so, so long

The world was upside down to them
The ones who followed the King
And our martyr was to soon leave the world
For doing no terrible thing

He told the truth to those who’d hear
And rejoiced in the ones who listened
And for the souls who closed their hearts
His tears, they always glistened

Some men who heard that he had preached
That he sang God’s mighty song
Warned him he could die for that
But still, the man sang on

And finally, his time had come
The government took him away
They knew they had to quiet him
To silence the words he would say

As the man stepped up to face his death
Eyes looked on him with hate
A man read the sentence, and he said
“We have decided on your fate”

Although they looked at him with hate
The man felt only God’s love
He closed his eyes, and then he said
As he turned his face above:

“Take this body, it is only a tool
To the spirit that makes up my being
Shred the flesh, but I have my soul
Bound for a land you’re not seeing

That’s my sorrow, though, at this time
Not your hate or your fatal lines
That I couldn’t make you see
Where the truest love lies

But I’ve done my best throughout this test
Fighting without a sword
And now I guess my work is done
And I’m ready to see the Lord”

The shots rang out, the body fell
But then, the dawn shined bright
It came to sinners on the earth
And to souls in immortal flight

Live on, my martyr, in Heaven above
We know that you aren’t dead
Although they destroyed your body
They never silenced the words you said

Live on in those who heard your words
Who heeded the things that you said
In those who were lost, and then were found
And travel the path that you lead

For you, I make this solemn vow today
I’d be proud to die for Him, someday

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

[This message has been edited by LoveBug (edited 07-23-2001).]

angel_2401
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1 posted 2001-07-23 05:59 PM

I like this. It's really powerful! I think it's great! Hope to see you more!

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

I'm a nobody, nobody is perfect, therefore I'm perfect.

keoni
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2 posted 2001-07-23 06:26 PM

LoveBug, this is awesome! I loved it. It's been a long time since I have seen a post, but this one is great. It's going in my library.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Spice
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3 posted 2001-07-23 11:03 PM

Hey, wow Erica...I really liked this. A very powerful write. You did an awesome job here.

Dopey Dope

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4 posted 2001-07-26 01:05 AM

Powerful song/poem Erica. I enjoyed every word of it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

JBaker515

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5 posted 2001-07-26 01:08 AM

Yes Erica, this was excelent!!
LOVED IT!!
Keep it up!

~Jeff~

"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."

anonymous albert ?

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6 posted 2001-07-26 02:24 AM

powerful, my friend

...its truly nice seeing your poetry again

...i think this...if you look into the meaning is quite deep the ending was awesome...i enjoyed both written and meaning alot...bye Erica

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Ina
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7 posted 2001-07-26 04:52 PM

This was awesome Erica! wow! very powerful. keep it up.

Regina

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8 posted 2001-07-31 12:30 PM

VERY powerful words here, Erica. Wow.. the message was awesome. I loved the ending.. the whole poem was beautiful. It flowed perfectly.. and there was a sort-of internal rhyme throughout that really worked well. nicely done! I REALLY enjoyed this.
Oh, and I'm glad to see the writer's block is gone!! Welcome back

I can't wait to read more soon.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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