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Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

0 posted 2001-07-23 12:06 PM

I quit holding on
So long ago
Or so I thought.
I thought it was possible
To let go without forgetting
And it is
But I do have to forgive...

It wasn't my choice
For these chains to remain
I thought they were gone
But those heavy chains were still there
Chaining my heart and soul to the past
While my mind and body pushed into the future
I am torn in two by these chains
And this time
Strength will not help me
The only solution
Is to break these chains
Without losing a part of me
But these chains are so strong...

I know I cant go back
I cant relive those painful years
Even to free myself
But how can I go on
With a part of me lost?

I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

DarkenedShadow
Member

since 2001-07-23

Posts 114
Kansas

1 posted 2001-07-23 12:37 PM

I feel you on this one in paticular. What strength can help us in time of unknown peril and reason?? I've asked my self a qustion or two in the same. /Nick/

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

2 posted 2001-07-23 02:54 PM

Wow, I totally connect with this poem. There is one specific instance in my life that I wish I could take back. Take back the time, the pain, the effort. But your still stuck, no matter what you do. I love it. This is going in my library.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-07-24 01:25 AM

I liked this one a lot! I thought you wrote it very nicely! I look forward to your future pieces.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

4 posted 2001-07-25 12:12 PM

Thanks. I didnt like this one as much as my others. Does anyone notice something missing, or something that sticks out? I wanted to see if I could make this one better.

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-07-29 02:41 AM

This was pretty good, although not as good as some of your other peices. I don't know if there's much that can be fixed, other than the repition of "these chains". That phrase is repeated many times, and begins to stick out a whole lot.
Like I said, I don't think that much can be done here. Thanks for sharing, though.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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