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TopGunLauren
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0 posted 2001-07-22 05:07 AM


I left all excited and I came home all sad,
Some people there made me happy but most made me mad.

For some reason I thought the people there actually would care,
Now I'm kind of glad that this was my last year there.

Even though all always remember all the awsome people I met,
And all the experiences I went through that I'll never forget.

The whole week I was there all I could think about was my friends,
But as I sat on the railing the last night I didn't want camp to end.

I actually got so sad I started to cry,
And as I walked to the car the next morning a part of me died.

No one who knows me will ever be able to see,
How much all those weeks I spent at camp over the last six summers really changed me.



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allie
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1 posted 2001-07-22 05:10 AM


nice post,
we dont have camps in Australia so i cant really relate to it... but still really nice flow,
enjoyed it heaps
ALLIE

Ina
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2 posted 2001-07-22 11:45 AM


This was great, very sad. It tugged and nagged at me...Reminded me of unfinshied responsiilties.
good work. keep them coming.

Regina

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3 posted 2001-07-22 01:23 PM


It's never easy, having to face the end of something that has been a part of your life for so long. You express yourself very well with this piece. Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

Spice
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4 posted 2001-07-23 11:31 PM


You expressed yourself very well. I went to camp once..hated it. Never went back. HaHa. But I'm sorry you will miss it. I enjoyed the read.  
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5 posted 2001-07-24 04:53 AM


I know how it feels to leave a bunch of friends like you do in camp....more than 6 times.....let's just say I moved a lot throughout my life.
Well done on the poem......I enjoyed this one.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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6 posted 2001-07-28 07:46 PM


This is awesome, Lauren!  I really enjoyed this... I know exactly what you're talking about.  I go to a WorkCamp every summer, and I wish it was more than just one week.  The people are awesome, and the environment is just so... safe.  I liked this poem a lot.  Hope to see more soon.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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