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The Only One
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Trina Member
since 2001-06-28
Posts 97 |
You said I was the only one the only one you ever loved the only one you ever cared for but the truth is I was the only one who ever loved you I was the only one who opened my heart and let you inside of me and in the end I was the only one who fell apart You never really felt for me you used me lied and tried to trick me well I guess you did do that But I've realized what you've done and your game is over because you're not the only one who's been playing |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
WOOOOOOHOOOOOOOOO!!!  GO Trina  I liked this very much "Four be the things I'd been better without: Love, curiosity, freckles and doubt." -- Dorothy Parker, on herself [This message has been edited by SEA (edited 07-21-2001).] |
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Trina Member
since 2001-06-28
Posts 97 |
Thanx Sea I'm glad you liked it. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
The 3rd stanza didn't sit well though. Dunno why- Just didn't like it. Other than that though I enjoyed it. Thanks for the read Keep posting. |
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Trina Member
since 2001-06-28
Posts 97 |
Thanx Spice , sorry you didn't like the 3rd stanza but glad you did like the rest of it. Thanx for your comments Take care, Trina |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Oh man!! If any there is a piece to connect with on the topic of relationships, THIS is IT! One guy, one act of stupidity...You described what you were feeling well. Thanks for sharing this, Trina. ~AF~ Tearless grief bleeds inwardly. |
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DarkenedShadow Member
since 2001-07-23
Posts 114Kansas |
I like how you reversed the whole poem in the end. It shows the pain and I guess thats what counts for you right?? Keep it coming. /Nick/ |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
Hehe...I've been there before! I just got out of a relationship where the guy had been cheating on me, but what he doesn't know is I cheated on him too, and outta that, I gots a guy that really cares, and wants to be with me. "A friend's shoulder makes a |
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Trina Member
since 2001-06-28
Posts 97 |
Thank you everyone for reading my poem. I must say I personally don't agree with cheating , I mean I feel hey if someone is cheating on me I'm not going to go out and cheat on them I'm just going to break up with them and find somebody better. I feel it's a waste of my time to stay with someone and then play the same old dirty game they playing. I wrote the poem just because I wanted something a little different besides the usual break up poem.Once again I thank you all for reading. Take care, Trina |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought it was well done. I agree with your views on cheating. Nicely said in your reply above. Anyhow, nice poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Trina Member
since 2001-06-28
Posts 97 |
Thanx for reading ,I'm glad you liked it. Take care, Trina |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Anyone who does agree with cheating has their morals a little mixed up.. Nicely done, Trina. I really enjoyed this... very emotional. Good work. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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Trina Member
since 2001-06-28
Posts 97 |
Thank you, I appreciate you taking time out to reply to my poem. Thanx again for reading. Take care, Trina |
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levon6618 Junior Member
since 2001-07-29
Posts 10 |
As with so many other poems in this forum, I can relate to this one. I've been in that boat before, except I didn't play the game. I was always true to my partners. Sorry, didn't mean to get personal. Very good write. Keep it up. |
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Trina Member
since 2001-06-28
Posts 97 |
No apologies needed , I'm glad people can relate to some of what I'm saying. Glad you took time out to read and thank you for your comments. Take care, Trina |
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