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Jessica
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0 posted 2001-07-21 01:41 AM


Someday you'll know me
Maybe it'll be too late
When you do
Don't hesitate
I've let it all show
So crystal clear
Don't regret it
It was my fear
When you understand things
You can finally forget me
Don't let it hurt you
I only wish you could see
You didn't think I would follow through
I could see it in your eyes
Don't let it get to you
I know the thoughts you despise


No this wasn't about a break-up but I had rather not say what it was about... You can figure it out.

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

© Copyright 2001 Jessica Langford - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-07-21 01:50 AM


Hmm...actually, I don't think it gives the feel about a breakup. More along the lines of people not seeing you the way you want to be seen. I seem to be going through a thing about that lately. Everyone sees the picture of you that they want to see, not the true you inside.

Anyway, maybe I'm wrong. This was a nice one. Not as good as No Way Out, but I liked it still.

-Kosetsu

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2 posted 2001-07-23 08:50 PM


I agree w/ Kosetsu- Thats what I thought it was about either. Anyway- I didn't like this as much as your others...I dunno...Just something about it. Thanks for the read though.  
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3 posted 2001-07-25 02:54 AM


Not as good as some of your previous work, but it was a good read nonetheless. I eagerly await more!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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4 posted 2001-07-25 10:19 AM


Good work I really enjoyed the read  
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5 posted 2001-07-25 07:53 PM


quite heartfelt...the emotions were nicely expressed...i liekd it...bye Jess#2

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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6 posted 2001-07-25 08:29 PM


It doesn't seem to be over a breakup at all, maybe about something you wanted someone to see if but for one second in time. Maybe thats it.... I hope in a way /Nick/
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7 posted 2001-08-24 07:25 PM


Jessica,

Very interesting poem.  I would like a little explanation to it though.  I believe these kind of poems can only be understood if the situation is actually known by the readers.  But if you would rather keep it to yourself, don't feel bad about it.  That's you decision and we have to respect that.  Keep sharing

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