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Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

0 posted 2001-07-21 12:27 PM

Just tell me…
Just tell me why…
Why can’t you see me?
Why can’t you hear me?
What’s the matter with you,
Can’t you face me?

Just tell me…
Just tell me why…
Why can’t you leave me?
Why can’t you hate me?
What’s the problem now,
Do you fear me?

Just tell me…
Just tell me why…
Why must you use me?
Why do you abuse me?
When will you wake up,
And face reality?

I’ll just tell you…
Just tell you why…
I’m done with these delusions,
I’ve seen through these illusions.
When you wake up,
Will you miss me?

"Eat, drink, and be merry, for tomorrow we die." - Shakespeare

Jessica

Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

1 posted 2001-07-21 01:54 AM

I really liked this one... I can relate so much.

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

Chel
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA

2 posted 2001-07-21 04:06 PM

nice piece. keep up the great work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front."
"You are special and unique in your own way." "Your FAITH is all you need"

Shygirl82
Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois

3 posted 2001-07-21 05:52 PM

Wow...I really liked this one ALOT!

"I’ll just tell you…
Just tell you why…
I’m done with these delusions,
I’ve seen through these illusions.
When you wake up,
Will you miss me?"

I was so totally feeling that last stanza...
Thanks so much for sharing!
~Nikki~

It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them.

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

4 posted 2001-07-23 09:04 PM

Not my fav. of your work Adam. I dunno, I didn't like the repetition used here. The last stanza was nice though.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-07-25 05:31 PM

I liked the formatting of the poem. The stanza's look like balls. Not that I like balls or anything

Anyhow, the poem wasn't great, but it was pretty good.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

6 posted 2001-07-25 05:39 PM

o_O Balls?
*doesn't want to know...*
Sure Dopey..whatever..

-Kosetsu

"Love, like the Rose, is desired. And like the Rose, Love has its thorns." - Unknown

Jessica

Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

7 posted 2001-07-25 06:24 PM

LMFAO@Dopes!!! Balls? OMG!

Ski*Chick
Member

since 2001-01-13

Posts 141
Fitchburg, Mass, Usa

8 posted 2001-07-25 06:54 PM

Hey I really liked your poem

Some people come into our lives and go quickly. Some people stay for awhile and leave footprints on our hearts. We are never ever the same.

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

9 posted 2001-07-30 03:39 PM

I liked the format here, Adam. I liked the way you ended this by changing the words around to make it the answer... Very nicely done here. I enjoyed this..

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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