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CLBinLOVE
Member

since 2000-06-04

Posts 147
Hilton Head, SC, USA

0 posted 2001-07-20 10:04 PM

molido
exausted
that feeling that you
are just semi-animated bricks
that feeling you get
when you close your eyes
and instant blackness consumes you
your body starts to fade
into the numbness of sleep
you dont care anymore
about staying awake
but you force your eyes open
and your brain out of the dream plain
it felt so good
just to close your eyes
for a few seconds
but it is so gut wrenching
to have to open them again
i need sleep

~well i thought about how tired it was, and it sounded kinda poetic, so here it is, not refurbished at all, not read over, jus put out there, i think that increases the fact of how sleepy i am hehe

"as below so above and beyond i imagine
drawn beyond the lines of reason
push the envelope, watch it bend"
--Tool

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

1 posted 2001-07-20 10:11 PM

Very nice Craig.
"molido" weird word.... (coulda used cansado!

)
Otherwise...

*thinks evil thoughts*...
I'm just going to keep my mouth closed on this one....

Bel

[This message has been edited by Isabel Galaxia (edited 07-20-2001).]

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

2 posted 2001-07-21 12:17 PM

What does that word mean?  Molido... Hmm..

Anywho, nicely done, here, Craig!  I really enjoyed this.  I loved the lines:
"it felt so good
just to close your eyes
for a few seconds
but it is so gut wrenching
to have to open them again"
I thought you were reading my mind.  Awesome work, keep posting all your work..

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

3 posted 2001-07-23 08:48 PM

Just 2 replies.... Damn these pages move too fast.
I really liked this. The way you wrote it was awesome. I agree w/ Marie- Those were great lines. Keep posting.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-07-24 04:34 AM

Nicely done here......*yawns*
I think you've shown us just how sleepy you truly were.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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