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MisguidedMuse New Member
since 2001-07-20
Posts 3 |
As my eyes empty out I can see the view clearly Without the blur of the stinging tears Things are getting harder now And I don’t know how to deal with my fears How can I solve my problem When I’m not even sure it’s there Maybe I’m making too much of this Or maybe I’m making too little of this scare Nothing is as it used to be But maybe it’s better in a sense My world is coming down around me And my troubles haven’t even had the chance to commence I’m young, too young to be like this Too young to feel like giving up But I can’t just say ‘That’s the way it is’ And walk away with an empty cup Is it stubbornness or hope that keeps me alive That keeps me on this wild goose chase For the fears of mine on which others thrive And I shudder whenever I get the taste Is it so much that I’m frightened or that I’m too real The oblivion of childhood is gone And now I’m suceptable to how I feel And I see now that what I knew was wrong People aren’t exactly how they seem And the people who you call family may lie I guess I was just living in a dream Now I lay my head in my arms and cry The reality of my life is crashing down Quicker than the tears that fall from my bloodshot blue eyes And I don’t want to be around When everyone else pulls off their cruel disguise Now I know the truth, and the truth hurts so much That I cannot even begin to put it in words Now I crave some lover’s gentle touch So maybe I can forget the lies I’ve heard Now more than ever I need to find love I need to find someone who understands So I get on my knees and pray to God above To guide me to my love with his strong hand Btw..I'm new here.  |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
First off...  Welcome to PIP! This was an absolutely AMAZING first post! I relate SO much it's scary...It reminded me of my "Lost Crown" poem I recently posted. You expressed yourself perfectly. My fav lines were... "And I don’t want to be around When everyone else pulls off their cruel disguise" This is a write to be extremely proud of. I hope to see you posting more in the near future. |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS! This was a wonderful poem to announce your being here. By the way, I really like your Username. CHeck your email for a cool greeting! Heavens Tears ~ Moderator/ Passions in Poetry |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Welcome to Passions in Poetry, MisguidedMuse! This was an AWESOME first post.. I related to this VERY well. Nicely done! I can't wait to see more posts and replies from you in the future Again, welcome to PIP.. I hope you like it here as much as I do! --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Wow that was great! I know how you feel....life sucks sometimes(!!). Welcome to passions, as if it hasn't been said before...  Bel |
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MisguidedMuse New Member
since 2001-07-20
Posts 3 |
Thanks. I don't want to sound sappy or anything, but it does mean alot when people say nice things about anything I write. I'm sure you can all relate because you all write from the heart as well. I'm anxious to read all the many great writings on here, if only there were more hours in the day |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Hey there, great first piece. I really enjoyed reading it. Keep up the great work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front." |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
 Welcome to Passions!! This first post is amazing. I could relate to almost every single line in this piece. I don't know what else to say because you have taken all words right out of mouth so thank you for sharing this. I will definitely be looking out for more of your poetry. ~AF~ Tearless grief bleeds inwardly. |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Welcome to Passions! To ditto what everyone else said, I can really relate to this piece. It is quite hard to enter the real world when you have lived you life in a dream haze of childhood dreams. You have already stated the best solution though (IMO), just go to God and He'll help you through. Thanks for sharing, and I hope to see more of you around here soon!  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions! Wonderful first post here! I truly enjoyed this! I hope to see more of your poems in the future!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Welcome! Excellent first post. I really enjoyed it. I hope you like it here cause I hope to read more of your work in the future.Great job on the poem. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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