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branden726
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0 posted 07-17-2001 09:11 AM       View Profile for branden726   Email branden726   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for branden726

Why cant you love me,
For who i am.

Why do you try to change me,
For the person you want.

Why do you touch me,
Just so you can dream about "him".

Why do you talk to me,
When all your doing is wasting time.

Why do you try to shape me,
In to something i can never be.

Why do you dream about him,
When you tell me you love me.

Why tell me you love me,
When all your gonna do is leave me.

Why play with me head,
I know all you want is me in bed.

Why dont you leave me alone,
My heart is crushed.

Why dont you just LEAVE ME ALONE
Im sitting here crying.

Why dont you love me for who i am,
Well i could never love you again.

*This well im starting up the so called "emotional" opening once again and thats how my poetry gets started ive been told this a 100 times  "ive seen better branden" well i know this isnt the best but you guys are asking and you will get just what my singnature says  *

All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare!
~*~Branden~*~

© Copyright 2001 Branden Jacobs - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 07-17-2001 09:17 AM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

Well Branden I thought this was good, although it's not your best... but I guess you already know that... anyway great venting...
Zu

"Here we are again finding ourselves at the end Of the wrong stick I guess it's far too late I'm building up the barricades In my head" -My Vitriol

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i think you let it out VERY well...tough situation, though...hope things work out for you, Branden

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3 posted 07-17-2001 06:24 PM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fading Away

Nice venting poem, Branden.  Venting poems always seem to be well written for everyone, because those are oftentimes the ones with the most emotion and power.  Nicely done, I enjoyed this.

"Why dont you love me for who i am,
Well i could never love you again."

Nice work.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning...

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4 posted 07-19-2001 01:24 AM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Nice vent...sounds like yer in a bind Mr. B.
Good luck with the whole thing.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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5 posted 07-19-2001 11:01 AM       View Profile for branden726   Email branden726   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for branden726

Thanx andrew,albert,marie,fading away, and dope for all you replies there is nothing going on with me but yeah i gotcha as i used to say....i havent been around but when i was for a while everyone used to think i was heart broken 24/7 and well i never was i was happy and had a gf..well if i dont state that its about me or what not then dont worries i hate worries   that was just from things i saw around me thanx.

All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare!
~*~Branden~*~

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6 posted 07-20-2001 10:03 PM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Branden, just because it isn't your best, doesn't mean that it wasn't good!  
I actually did like it because of the simple emotions expressed really well in couplets. it sounds like she did you wrong. Hopefully you can get fully over this pain.  

~AF~

Psychopathic chickens are plotting against me...

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7 posted 12-02-2002 06:20 PM       View Profile for Sweetiepie38   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Sweetiepie38

Great poem keep up the good work. Sounds like one i have seen before.
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