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branden726
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0 posted 2001-07-15 10:03 PM


The love i dont want,
Belongs to only you,
The love i dont want,
Yest its very True,
The love i dont want,
Is the blackness of your heart,
The love i dont want,
Can only come from you,
The love i dont want,
Is yours cus you've hurt me so many other times,
The love i dont want,
Is only cus it hurts,
The love i dont want,
Yes its your love,
Your not like the dove i thought you were,
Dark,evil,and everything between,
I want nothing to do with you,
Little queen bee,
You think your so tough,
But deep down your not,
I could take you out in one shot,
But i swore i never would,
I loved and showed you i did,
And u treated me like a kid,
Its all over now and im happy as can be,
Your the one mourning now,
Im sorry to say but all i can do is laugh at you now,
This is the end of our time, your time and mine.
Together never again will it be,
Just remember i did once love you my little miss bee.
(when i said *Shot* not by anymeans would i mean to actually shoot someone i mean like if i was to punch them which i could never do either its just an expression but it didnt sound right so i thought i would clear itu p)


All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare!
~*~Branden~*~

[This message has been edited by branden726 (edited 07-15-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-07-15 11:03 PM


*tsk, tsk, tsk*   Branden, I thought you knew better than to go around shooting ppl. *shakes head* I can't believe it!! lol, anyway, I like this poem!!   though it is kinda sad  
oh well!! heehee, catcha later!

I LOVE ZU, hey Albie, Cody, Allan, Carly, Cherish, Lizzy, Kris, *HUGS JAVI*, Tamma, Acire, and Branden.
*HUGS ZU*

Mykels_Angel
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2 posted 2001-07-15 11:15 PM


this is really good
keep up the good work!

branden726
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3 posted 2001-07-15 11:21 PM


Well ya know i couldnt harm a fly and everyone here knows that   so there and thanx for your replie although yes it is sad.

All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare!
~*~Branden~*~

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4 posted 2001-07-16 04:03 PM


Although I liked this, Branden, I think I've read better from you.  The rhyme scheme here is very sporadic.  Nonetheless, thanks for sharing.  Enjoyed, as always.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

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5 posted 2001-07-16 06:03 PM


It wuz a good poems Branden.

Keep it up!
Alexia

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6 posted 2001-07-17 03:23 AM


I was feelin this one...so I liked it alot...until next time...
~Nikki~

It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them.

branden726
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7 posted 2001-07-17 08:55 AM


Thanx guys and yes you all have read better from me but im still in the proscess of getting the feeling for poetry back.

All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare!
~*~Branden~*~

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8 posted 2001-07-17 01:59 PM


a lot of bitterness...well i liked it...good job, Branden

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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9 posted 2001-07-17 07:18 PM


Hey Mr.B......this about your GF? If so then gee sounds like yer going through some rough times. If this is about some Bee....then...ok haha. I enjoyed the poem, thought it was nice.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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10 posted 2001-07-22 02:44 AM


I really like this one from you, Branden. It shows your true emotions and how much this horrid girl put you through.
Fave line: "Dark,evil,and everything between,"
It reminded me of someone I know. Heh...  

Thanks for the read.

~AF~

Tearless grief bleeds inwardly.
~ Christian Nevell Bovee ~

allie
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11 posted 2001-07-22 05:07 AM


ouch... because i've been there, but as the "love you dont want"... with my ex...
I can therefore relate to this... and its quite an emotional peice...

Fabulous work though

ALLIE

branden726
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12 posted 2001-07-22 11:51 PM


Thanks for the replies all and guess what its not about me....its about a friend and what he's gone throught......well thanx

All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare!
~*~Branden~*~

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