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Tamma
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0 posted 2001-07-15 08:26 PM


~*~ Upon My 18th ~*~

Upon my 18th birthday,
My life crumbled below me
Children ran around, yelling at me
My boyfriend dropped me like nothing
He said he didn’t love me anymore
Everyone I cared for has passed
It’s been 8 months since my 18th
My entire life went downhill
And now I’m worried about Mom
The surgery is for the 23rd
They said it could be cancer
I don’t wanna lose her too
That would crush me
There are so many things
That I have on my mind
I’ve cried so much lately
Nothing seems worth it anymore
Even my writing . . .
Has become nothing to me
The single thing in my life
That makes everything better
SUCKS!
I can’t even do that right anymore
Upon my 18th birthday,
I become nothing, no one
To everyone I care about.

*sigh* I can't write worth crap anymore...


"A friend's shoulder makes a
nice pillow when you're crying" ~Me
"If beauty is in the eye of the beholder, I guess love is too" ~Me

[This message has been edited by Tamma (edited 07-15-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Tamma M. Wilson - All Rights Reserved
DarkAngelOfTheStars
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1 posted 2001-07-15 08:53 PM


tamma i dont know you really at all.....ive read some of your stuff and im sorry what is going on in your life *hugs* if you ever need to talk im here email me or something. I hope everything turns out with your mom...and everything else....your poem was good.

story of my life: I am so self destructive, I turn solutions into problems. Everything i touch i ruin. Im midas in reverse

lil_pwheeler
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2 posted 2001-07-15 09:38 PM


Id like to say i understand. that would be a lie. I cant. Just try stay around awhile with us here. Hopefully yull get over it. Best for ya
Pat

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3 posted 2001-07-15 10:10 PM


Tamma you depict something really strong in your poetry and you tell what is defenitly bothering you, this poems of your is full of emotions that have been troubling you and you seem to glue it all to your 18th birthday, I may not relate directly with what you are going through but I can tell you this: In life you will see and experience many different things and through these emotions we become who we are depending on how each experiance affects us. Life will not be happy go lucky for ever and bad things will happen to everyone but you have to think that at some point things will get better, try not to worry about your mom so much, technology in all those operations have advanced alot and even though you will be worried try to be positive because she is been operated so that means she's going to be cured after the operation hopefully I wish you the best now and always, and if you ever need anything email me or anyone else, here we ARE a family of friends, and we all know life is hard. Thanks for posting, good job.

I see the darkness coming all is bleak...

branden726
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4 posted 2001-07-15 10:14 PM


TAMMA!!! Im here and ive always been here for you and you know it. Not at anytime will you be alone if you need some help or someone to talk to my email is branden726@hotmail.com you know that and my screen name on aim is LiLPoohBear925 well this was sad very very sad i hope everything works out for you and i know ill pray for you and hopefully everyone else will to.

All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare!
~*~Branden~*~

stace_co2003
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In a dream world
5 posted 2001-07-15 10:14 PM


*hugs*

I think you've written better, yes, but this is still good. just keep writing, you'll make it through this.

I LOVE ZU, hey Albie, Cody, Allan, Carly, Cherish, Lizzy, Kris, *HUGS JAVI*, Tamma, Acire, and Branden.
*HUGS ZU*

Mykels_Angel
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6 posted 2001-07-15 11:21 PM


this is really good
keep up the good work!

Mykels_Angel
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7 posted 2001-07-15 11:23 PM


awww
*big cuddles*

if your boyfriend did that to you hes not worth it anyway

you deserve better

if you need anyone to talk to you can mail me at rammstein_chick@hotmail.com

chin up chicky pie!

Fading Away
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8 posted 2001-07-16 04:28 PM


Aww, Tamma... *hugs* I'm so sorry that all this has happened.  But look at it this way: You've fought through so many different things.  You've stayed strong for this long, you can stay strong longer.  Good luck with everything... *hug* You have everyone here at PIP to turn to, whenever.  I hope everthing turns out okay...
As for your writing, your poems in no way suck.  You're a talented writer, and pout so much of yourself into your poems.  That's what makes good poetry.
Keep your head up, and stay strong.  Things will work out for the best... Good luck.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

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9 posted 2001-07-17 06:59 PM


There's lots of emotions in this one Tamma. This is the kind of reply where you can't go without plugging in some sort of advice. I wish your mom the best of luck.....just stay strong and weed out the stupid problems that really only add a hasstle to think about. Some problems aren't worth the time.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

fearing-laughter
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10 posted 2001-07-18 06:25 AM


hey hey, i liked this one.  i do not see why you care if other people think you can't write.  who gives a damn what other people think, as long as the poetry helps YOU.  i wish you good luck, and hopefully your mother is okay. i'll pray for ya.  be happy, not sad.
-fear-

i'm a penguin! i'm a penguin! i'm a cute lil penguiiiin! i'm a penguin i'm a penguin! i eat FISH!--tis the pretty penguin song

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