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Ina
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2001-07-15 06:34 PM



THEORY OF LOVE

This theory of love
tugs at his black heart
where are these serene
feelings coming from
It's not me
I'm the keeper of hatred
in this disgusting world
I don't ask many questions
I do take away many lives
Why do I feel a new light
within me
a blossoming feeling
is devouring my darkness
Where is this weakness coming from
do your words mean anything?
This deep cicular cycle never ending
never beginning
acute pressure crushes my lungs
like and iron fist
slow, steady flow of words leave my
mouth
a painful sensation leaves me
breathless
the pain in my heart
slowly fades
as the blood pumps onto the ground
his eyes roll back
arms go limp
he crys
and dies
dies for the love

Regina


If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive.

© Copyright 2001 Regina Levy - All Rights Reserved
pure_innocence
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since 2001-07-14
Posts 80
Colorado, US
1 posted 2001-07-15 07:12 PM


How sad!!!! How good!!!!! Incredably depressing as is your signature but the truth isn't often without pain nor always beautiful.  Harsh message, amazing descriptions, I thoroughly enjoyed. Thanks for sharing, keep it up!
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2 posted 2001-07-16 12:12 PM


dark and sad...you wrote this one VERY nicely, Ina ...i liked it lots...esp the discriptions were great!

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Fading Away
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Posts 3131
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3 posted 2001-07-16 04:42 PM


VERY dark... I'm really enjoying this series.  You write such dark poetry, but at the same time, it's beautiful and full of emotion.  Wow, I really enjoyed this one.  The ending was awesome.  Nicely done, Regi!

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

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San Juan, Puerto Rico
4 posted 2001-07-17 08:22 PM


Wowness, you are writing such strong poetry here in this little series. Great job on this one regi!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

knightlyshadows
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since 2001-04-14
Posts 791
obscured vision
5 posted 2001-07-17 09:48 PM


loved it.

I am Gaudior
the shadow cast of valour
to cloak our vision
the remants of days long past
lay waking in the twilight

fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24
Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)
6 posted 2001-07-18 06:10 AM


as awesome as the purple monkeys in my head
-fear-

i'm a penguin! i'm a penguin! i'm a cute lil penguiiiin! i'm a penguin i'm a penguin! i eat FISH!--tis the pretty penguin song

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Twilight Zone
7 posted 2001-08-01 09:12 AM


You have become one poet who's poems I really enjoy reading a lot.  I'm glad that you've decided to share all these Valley poems.  Thanks for such a wonderful and excellent read Ina.  keep it up

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

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