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CountryGirl4U
New Member

since 2001-07-14

Posts 6
Sexiest Cowgirl

0 posted 2001-07-15 12:58 PM

    ~ I am the blue eyed girl no one pays
     attention too ~

     *I am the dark brown haired girl no one
     talks too*

     ~I am the short girl in the corner~

    * I am the girl that always wears greatful
     dead shirts *

     ~I am the girl that always wears jeans~

    * I am the girl that always has my music
     blaring

    ~ I am the girl that is always so shy~
     **You are the boy that has the brightest
     blue eye's**

     ~*You are the boy that has the cole black
     hair~*

    *~ You are the boy that is so popular

     You are the boy that everyone likes~*

     **You are the boy that gave me my first
     kiss**

     ~*You are the boy that stole my heart Away*~

     *~You are the boy that said those 3 little
     Words to me~*

    ** You are the boy that fell in love with ...

The girl that was so short~~

*~The girl that always wore greatful dead shirts~*

~~~~The girl that always wore jeans~~~~

*~*~*~The girl that was so shy*~*~*~

Dedicated to Joey
I love you

*~Summer~*

CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

1 posted 2001-07-15 01:12 AM

I like this... I can actually relate to it... 'cept I'm the BOY that noone likes... But it's all good. Liked the poem alot.

- Cody -

If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

JBaker515

Member

since 2001-02-28

Posts 458
Dartmouth College

2 posted 2001-07-15 01:21 AM

Summer, i liked what was said...

But to the format......
It was hard for me to get into a good flow to read this..i think you should change it so its more like a poem, rather then many seperate lines...

Then it will be really good!!
Hope u take my advice, i think more people would like it if u changed the way it was set up!!

GOod write over all though!!

~Jeff~

"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-07-15 01:50 AM

i enjoyed this poem...i though this was creative...you expressed it nicely...great job, Summer

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 07-15-2001).]

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

4 posted 2001-07-15 02:46 AM

Awwww- I really liked this.
Very nice write.
Keep posting.

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-07-16 02:48 AM

I liked the format of this, although I think the flow would work better if the stars and little keys at the beginning of each line were not there. Also, I think you could do without line breaks in between each line. Nice work, though. The conent is great. The way you explained the situation was well done. I enjoyed this.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-07-17 08:14 PM

Wow the format was really good. I liked it a lot. Happy ending to the poem too...nice.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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