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lil_pwheeler
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0 posted 2001-07-15 12:40 PM


We've been Happy
We've been sad
But I bet
You at least had a dad

I myself
Had no such luxury
Its not easy
I agree

My mom
Never loved another
I guess thats why
I have no brother

Sometimes
If I think real hard
I can picture me little
Craddled in his arms

When I reunite up there
The very day I die
He'll pick me up and hug me
Way up in the sky



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Spice
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1 posted 2001-07-15 12:44 PM


Awww- this was bitter sweet.
Sad that you lived without a dad...but Happy that one day he'll hold you in his arms...
Great poem here!  

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2 posted 2001-07-15 12:47 PM


This was lovely.  Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us.  I enjoyed it, would like to see more of your work  

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I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."
                                

lil_pwheeler
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3 posted 2001-07-15 12:51 PM


This isnt about me. My best friend had his die real early in his life in a car accident. He talks to me a lot about it and id try to write what its like for him

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4 posted 2001-07-15 12:51 PM


It was sad yet beautiful...i really liked the feelings you put into this...nice job.
CwboyAtHeart
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5 posted 2001-07-15 01:15 AM


Nice job.  Very well written.

      - Cody -

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If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

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6 posted 2001-07-15 01:16 AM


nice job kiddo, great to see you here!!

Cant wait to read more:0

~Jeff~

"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."



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7 posted 2001-07-15 01:53 AM


lovely write...very heartfelt...and i wish the best for your friend...a nice tribute to his father

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8 posted 2001-07-16 02:43 AM


Very heartwrenching read.  Stay strong, and keep your head up   Nicely done.  Thanks for sharing

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

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9 posted 2001-07-17 08:11 PM


Awesome job, but it's so sad....I really hope the ending does happen though  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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