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MoeRocko
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since 2001-04-25
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West Virginia

0 posted 2001-07-14 12:44 PM



No need to fear, I can hear your word say
But my eyes filled with tears
Because you felt far away
So I returned to our place and to my suprise
You were much closer than I realized

Closer, You were much closer
It took all this time to realize
You were standing right by my side

Sometimes my fears are hard to mask
Because my storms don't want to pass
So when my mind feels confused
and my heart starts to stray
I call upon the name of my Lord
and I hear him say

No Need To Fear...


If there's a such thing as a Genius, then I'm one. If there's no such thing then I don't care...  ~John Lennon
  

[This message has been edited by MoeRocko (edited 07-14-2001).]

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pure_innocence
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since 2001-07-14
Posts 80
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1 posted 2001-07-14 02:08 PM


I liked this very much, the message I derived from it was beautiful as well as common.  You felt scared, alone, and searched for that which made you feel right again, knowing all along it/he/she was gone.  Then after some soul searching you found it had never left, that it was closer then you'd thought.  Knowing you held it inside of you "much closer" to you gave you strength, courage beyond the fear. Stop me if I'm wrong, that's just the way I interpreted it, regardless, it was beautiful.  You are talented, I hope to read more of your work.
CwboyAtHeart
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Selah, WA, USA
2 posted 2001-07-14 03:37 PM


Wow! I loved this one.  I like how you had all your problems, but in the end you found that God is always there, and you have nothing to fear.  Awesome, keep writing.

      - Cody -

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Spice
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since 2001-04-13
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3 posted 2001-07-14 11:14 PM


Nice read Moe. I enjoyed it. I'm glad you found someone to call on for strength.
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4 posted 2001-07-16 02:35 AM


Awesome work, Moe.  Lots of emotion was poured into this poem... this is one of my favorites by you.  Nicely done, indeed.  My favorite lines were: "I call upon the name/of my Lord/and I hear him say/No Need To Fear..."

Nice work!!

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

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5 posted 2001-07-17 08:09 PM


You've come back with awesome poems. I loved this one aswell. Great job on this. The ending is mind blowing. Simply kick butt poetry.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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