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Allysa
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0 posted 2001-07-14 11:41 AM



I seem to loose myself,
whenever I look into your eyes,
you're not just someone I know,
you're my blue eyes angel in disguise.

You can save me from the world,
you can rescue me from their lies.
You can hold me up above the clouds,
spread your wings and help me to fly.

Your blue eyes are so mezmorizing,
you capture my soul with them,
come be my blue eyed angel,
and let me fly w/ you again.

I seem to loose myself,
whenever I look into your eyes,
you're not just someone I know,
you're my blue eyed angel in disguise.

I just want to look at you,
to see myyself when I see you,
to loose myself in the blueness,
and not know what to do.

You hold my heart in your eyes,
you hold my glance when you're around,
and when I look into your eyes,
my true happiness can be found.

I seem to loose myself,
whenever I look into your eyes,
you're not just someone i know,
you're my blue eyed angel in disguise.

I look at you and you look away,
but I see the deepness of your eyes,
you look at me a minute later,
and my eyes never lie.

I wonder what you see,
when you look through to my soul,
if you see yourself with me,
because only then am I whole.

I seem to loose myself,
whenever I look into your eyes,
you're not just someone I know,
you're my blue eyed angel in disguise.

You listen when i talk to you,
you seem to understand,
and when we sit together,
you let me hold your hand.

You once loved me truly,
and I wonder if you still do,
but I guess I'll never know,
because I'll never ask you.

I seem to loose myself,
whenever I look into your eyes,
you're not just someone I know,
you're my blue eyed angel in disguise.

I don't want another acquaintence,
I don't want another friend,
I don't want you to not listen,
just please hold me till the end.

I don't want another lover,
all I want is you,
you are my blue eyed angel,
please tell me what to do.

I seem to loose myself,
whenever I look into your eyes,
you're not just someone I know,
you're my blue eyed angel in disguise.


Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself.  That's what I live by.

© Copyright 2001 Allysa - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-07-14 12:52 PM


THIS IS GREAT!!!!!!!!   i know a person like this. Everyone should have a blue eyed angel in disguise. only mine had brown eyes  
but anyway SUPERB JOB!!!  i love it thanks for sharing


Valerie

"...And i want to take you down, but your soul could not be found, doesn't matter much you see cause your disease is killing me..." -Saliva

anonymousfemale
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2 posted 2001-07-14 01:02 PM


Just beautiful Allysa. Those blue eyed angels are the best. More like life savers actually. You've written this really well. You should be extremely proud.  

Thanks for sharing this.

~AF~

Psychopathic chickens are plotting against me...

little_krazy_poet
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3 posted 2001-07-14 01:26 PM


i liked the poem. hope to see more
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4 posted 2001-07-14 01:42 PM


im loving this piece...wonderful job!...VERY beautiful...i enjoyed this one greatly, Allysa

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

pure_innocence
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5 posted 2001-07-14 01:49 PM


I wish I had my own Blue Eyed Angel, heck, I wish I had an angel of my own period!!   Lovely poem, your descriptions were vivid and I felt you wrote from the heart.  I'm new to this site, and yours is the first poem I've read.  If Blue Eyed Angel is a hint to the quailty of the other poetry, I have much to look forward to. Beautiful poem, talented artist.
Shygirl82
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6 posted 2001-07-14 07:02 PM


Loved it!!!!  I had a blue eyed angel of my own once and they are a wonderful person to have around.  You wrote this just simply beautiful.  Excellent job!
~Nikki~

It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them.

JBaker515
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7 posted 2001-07-14 07:23 PM


ya i really did find this piece enjoyable!!

Keep it up!!

~Jeff~

"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."



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8 posted 2001-07-14 07:40 PM


aww...this is so beautiful...i really loved this one so much...great job!!

*×´¨`·.×*Raven Skye*×´¨`·.×*
Don't just trust yourself,
learn what parts of yourself to trust.

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9 posted 2001-07-15 05:03 AM


I thought "Justin" throughout this whole poem. Am i right?
Well I liked the poem, long but well written.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Allysa
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10 posted 2001-07-15 01:29 PM


Thanks everyone! When I read your comments, I couldn't believe you all were talking about ME and My Poem.

Dopes, you're right.  This piece just screams JUSTIN, doesn't it?  I don't think he'll ever read it though.  i've given up on the poetry thing w/ him.  I mean, I would have to have the self confidence to stand there while he read it and then ask him what he thought, and I lack that.  Last time I tried and it was on the phone, and I ended up getting a tad SHY (can you believe that? Me? SHY?) and hanging up in the end. Yup, he's my blue eyed angel.  No Joke.  When i was standing by him one time, I was looking at his eyes and one of my friends was asking me a question.  Then they asked me for my answer.  They were like "Alyssa, what's your answer" and I was like "I don't even know the question" because I got so wrapped up in his eyes. UGH!

Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself.  That's what I live by.

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11 posted 2001-07-16 10:42 AM


This is a very well written poem, Allysa.  I thought it started off slow, and the beginning tended to be a little repetitious about the eyes, but towards the middle it really started to hold my attention.  I guess mostly because I've been there, and not long ago at all.  I know the feeling.  You portrayed your emotions and feelings toward the person very well.  Impressive poem.  I enjoyed it.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

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