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Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

0 posted 2001-07-13 12:09 PM

God, I need help
I don't know who else to turn to
If you know my every thought
Then can you explain them to me?

God, I need help
My heart feels like it's totally empty
If you know my every emotion
Then can you tell me what I'm feeling?

God, I need help
I feel like there's no purpose
If you've seen my every tear
Then can you wipe the future ones away?

God, I need help
I feel I'm not wanted or loved
If you've seen my every heartbreak
Then can you heal my shattered heart?

God, I need help
Life just seems so... blah
If you've felt every disappointment
Then can you help me turn to you?

God, I need help
I've strayed so far away
If every sin I've done has hurt you
Then can you help me not to sin any more?

God, I need help
I can't do it on my own
If you really died for me so long ago
Then can you forgive me for all I've done?

God, I need help
I think we need to talk
I don't want to be 'blah' anymore
Will you ever take me back?

God, I need help
Let's go talk.

DarkAngelOfTheStars
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since 2001-04-21

Posts 255

1 posted 2001-07-13 12:17 PM

wow....this really hit home. i use to me really into god and stuff....but things have happend and it just doesnt feel like hes there or anything....yeah but anyways i like the *if you* parts. great job! really made me think.

story of my life: I am so self destructive, I turn solutions into problems. Everything i touch i ruin. Im midas in reverse

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-07-13 12:18 PM

the questions after every stanza...worked very well on telling this feeling...and this is something similarly i pray these days...hit me hard!...hope he answers yours...as i wait for him to do for me.

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 07-13-2001).]

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

3 posted 2001-07-13 03:34 AM

No comment on the content but your format was good.

~AF~

GREMLINS ARE TRYING TO STEAL MY PANTS!!!!!!! *sobs*

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

4 posted 2001-07-13 04:05 PM

Nice read, Rhonda.
I agree with Albert- The questions went well.

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-07-16 01:38 AM

This is an awesome poem. One of the best I've read from you. It takes a lot of courage to ask for help like this. I really loved the last two lines. VERY nice poem. It's a library piece... like I said, it takes a lot to ask for help like this. Stay strong

You'll make it through.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

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San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-07-17 07:56 PM

I really thought this one was touching in the end. I liked it a lot!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Ina
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

7 posted 2001-07-17 08:05 PM

This was good with the repetion. i hope all is well or will be well.

Regina

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

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Somewhere... out there...

8 posted 2001-08-16 02:39 AM

Skyfire-
   Very emotional write, and wonderfully done.

       "God, I need help
       Life just seems so... blah
       If you've felt every disappointment
       Then can you help me turn to you?"

   You just did turn to Him...the moment
   you wrote this heartfelt piece.
   Hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

Ski*Chick
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since 2001-01-13

Posts 141
Fitchburg, Mass, Usa

9 posted 2001-08-16 10:23 AM

hey that was a nice poem, he'll help you give it time.

Some people come into our lives and go quickly. Some people stay for awhile and leave footprints on our hearts. We are never ever the same.

Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

10 posted 2001-08-17 09:04 PM

Things will get better. Hang in there

smile!
Bel

Poet Unknown
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 140
Missouri

11 posted 2001-08-17 09:17 PM

i enjoyed it, the questions at the end of each stanza were a good call, very good poem

Only darkness falls on those without souls

AngelPoet87
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since 2001-04-21

Posts 280
Indy

12 posted 2001-08-17 10:04 PM

*applause* great post!

Liefhe alle ten spijte van duivel.

DarkAngelOfTheStars
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 255

13 posted 2001-08-18 06:43 PM

i started reading this and then i was like....hey i remember this one!

anyways its a great poem!

You know you 've completely descended into madness when the matter of shampoo has ascended to philosophical heights

cutie2005
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 148
Bennett, Colorado USA

14 posted 2001-08-18 11:09 PM

This was very nice!! I like it... and "god I need help" is what I feel like saying every nite!!!!!   I'm so glad that you posted this it was a good read thankyou!!!
  Always
    Amanda

If you love someone you would go to the end of the world for them!

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