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lilibeelee
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since 2001-07-12

Posts 143

0 posted 2001-07-12 10:48 PM

Where would I be without your love You are an angel from above
Where would I be with out you I have all these feelings I know there all true
I wouldnt be where Iam today I can't stop thinking about you as I lay
I cant get you off of my mind out of my heart
I know I dont ever want us to be apart You have no idea how much you mean to me
If it wasnt for you where would I be? When I'm with you I can be myself
I know I want you and noone else
I want you for the rest of my life for now till eternity Just you and me
Together sharing everything Your love is so amazing
Its like you can read my mind and know what iam thinking about
I love you forever and always will no Doubt
I swear on everything I own I will always love you and only you
be loyal never lie or cheat too
I wouldnt ever do anything to hurt you I would rather die
You are so amazing you are the perfect guy
Some call me crazy for saying Iam in love at this age that iam right now
I sit here and ask god how? how come i was so lucky to find someone like you
I love you forever and that is true.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

1 posted 2001-07-14 03:40 PM

You have been impressing me with the emotions you invoke in you poems. This poem is really sweet and heartfelt. I'd love to see more of your work in the near future. keep em coming.

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anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-07-14 08:44 PM

...your emotions are so heartfelt...your feelings were well written...i enjoyed the poem

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Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

3 posted 2001-07-14 11:27 PM

A sweet read. I really enjoyed it.
BUT- use punctuation! This was just one BIG HUGE sentence. It hurt the poem... Add some periods in there.
ANYWAY! Other than that I really liked it. You expressed yourself well.

CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

4 posted 2001-07-15 01:21 AM

I'm with Spice, use punctuation. It looks too bunchy... But other than that, the poem was great. You definitely have feeling and emotion in all your work, and that always makes the best writing. Keep it comin!

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-07-17 07:10 PM

Wow, pretty sweet there. You write very nicely. Very nicely indeed. Maybe if you follow the punct. advice you'd be a bit more set

Good luck!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

6 posted 2001-07-22 02:39 AM

This is so nice.

It's great to hear you have found someone that you love that much.

Thanks for the read.

~AF~

Tearless grief bleeds inwardly.
~ Christian Nevell Bovee ~

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