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Passionate Lover |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
This one is short cuz the stump blocked me again... Entwined in white, in the early morning light. Hidden partly by covers, wrapped in one another. Gentle movements of pleasure, memories to truly treasure. In their own little world with only one another, becoming one, passionate lover. "Like, yeah."-the famous cheerleaders |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
kinda steamy there......  I think this could have gone much father, glad it didn't in teen though good writing |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
very nice touch to it ...i liked how youe xpressed this with such words of feelings...great job!im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done here Alyssa. I could just envision the two entertwined as one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Starnite Junior Member
since 2001-07-05
Posts 41Wisconsin |
Dang that was good. Even though it was short. I like it a lot. **Sarah  |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
lol thanks guyz i am currently writing(tryin to at least) more to this. i will post it in dark passions probby. thanks again "I wanna be bad"-willa ford |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Oooooo Allysa pretty hot stuff here and I love it Have't really read much of your work but I'm definitely liking it so far keep sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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BoredBabe18 New Member
since 2001-07-16
Posts 1Im A Babe-get over it! |
Hey Alyssa I like this poem alot. I have finally made it to the teen poetry 5 in PIP. LOL Brandi "You can suck and still be cool" |
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DarkenedShadow Member
since 2001-07-23
Posts 114Kansas |
ohhh la la it sure gave me a visual, if only for a second. This is short but it REALLY gets its point across. /Nick/ |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
This was filled with beauty. |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
I agree with Spice...this was beautiful..it had a great amount of passion in it too. I hope you do go further with this one...I think it will turn out great! ~Nikki~ It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Grrrr...haha  Now THIS brings back the happy memories. Very happy memories actually. Thanks for the read, Alyssa.  ~AF~ "Write something, even if it's just a suicide note." -- Gore Vidal |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
great piece, keep up the great work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front." |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Great job sis! Made me think of me and Justin. HA! Like THAT's gonna happen anytime soon! *hugs*  Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by. |
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