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Sillyness (the ramblings of someone in love!)
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Sillyness (the ramblings of someone in love!) |
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thedarkangel Member
since 2001-05-12
Posts 74~*~the cutest~*~ |
I know I truly love you and everyone knows that's true but sometimes you make me cry with the silly things you do it's not specific things sometimes the way you act like when you fall out of trees i feel the need to watch your back. it's not your fault that i cry it's the silly way i feel the way every night i hope and pray that what we have is real i love the way you touch my hair when i'm only half awake i love the way you hold me like you're scared that i will break i hate the way you laugh at me then quickly say "i jest" i hate the way you're always on my mind and away from you i cannot rest so there are some of my crazy reasons and you know the good times outnumber the bad and it's the fact i can't be with you now that really makes me sad. Be honest and don't follow fads and fashion. do what you do and do it well ~*~jon bon jovi~*~ |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
It's not Sillyness.....hehe Just feelings we go through. I liked this a lot. Well done here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
"I hate the way you're always on my mind and away from you I cannot rest" I loved those lines. I can relate many times to those. I'm sure alot of people will be able to. Sweet write Laura. I liked this alot. |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
I can relate to this, this poem painted a few images of my past while reading it. Excellent work. "Right now I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before." |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Sometimes rambling makes the best poetry! Great job with this one. Thanks for the great read! *Amanda* |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
"and it's the fact i can't be with you now that really makes me sad." exactly how i feel...very nice job on expressing this...related to it  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I didn't read any silliness here. Just true, honest feelings, written from the heart. Nicely done, I really enjoyed this, and I'm very happy for you for finding that person. Beautiful work --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Wow! I can REALLY relate to this. "so there are some of my crazy reasons and you know the good times outnumber the bad and it's the fact i can't be with you now that really makes me sad." That's the part that really got me. I loved this one and it's going to my library. Thanks for posting and keep 'em comin! Good job. - Cody - |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Wow! I can REALLY relate to this. "so there are some of my crazy reasons and you know the good times outnumber the bad and it's the fact i can't be with you now that really makes me sad." That's the part that really got me. I loved this one and it's going to my library. Thanks for posting and keep 'em comin! Good job. - Cody - |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
i really love this poem, i know just what its like to get angry or annoyed at someone you love so much... Its toatally normal, and yet you made it an extraordinary post! ALLIE |
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