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Bishop
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since 2001-04-22
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Nottingham, England

0 posted 2001-07-11 05:14 AM



The sad fact of life is
that we ruin our destiny
what is good in life
we destroy because we cant see

Companionship makes us happy
but all it is is cosmetic
what we need lies within
to stop our lives becoming pathetic

We sail in this boat not alone
for we all end up alike
suffering from the same trends
given to us from elders in spite

If we want escape the circle
we need to leave the trap
break free,

start again.




^*Bishop*^

*Evil has many faces, and I'm one of them*

© Copyright 2001 Matt Bishop - All Rights Reserved
thedarkangel
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1 posted 2001-07-11 05:33 AM


that's cool... i wasnt too sure about the ending, but a generally good piece you displayed your feelings accuratly.
laura
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Be honest and don't follow fads and fashion. do what you do and do it well ~*~jon bon jovi~*~

n e where
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2 posted 2001-07-11 05:51 AM


this is a very true poem   dito on the ending...but it was well written

~I'd rather see the world from another angle~ Jewel.

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3 posted 2001-07-11 06:02 AM


Oh wow, simply awesome! Superb work here! Left me in awe! I really loved this. The whole meaning was great and so true. Well done here....impressive stuff.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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4 posted 2001-07-12 02:39 AM


i loved this piece...amazizng meaning and truth behind this...very inspring and very well written...and im glad to see you post again ...wow.

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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5 posted 2001-07-24 07:53 PM


You have really strong words in there.  This was really well done.  *applauds*

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

DarkenedShadow
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6 posted 2001-07-24 10:56 PM


I find great wisdom in your words but what is our destiny but a figmantation of our own selfless clauses?? I like your point and the whole poem for that matter. /Nick/
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