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Once Upon A Time... |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL 
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12:16 AM 7/11/01 Jessica Once upon a time... There was an innocent girl Free of heart-ache Not tangeled in this world Once upon a time... She played in the sand With her dolls Delicately in her hands Once upon a time... Her dreams contained hopes Of a care-free life No pain to cope Once upon a time... She started to grow up Wearing make-up on her sweet face Having the highest hopes Once upon a time... This "young lady" wanted more Than what life brought Not yet knowing what she was searching for Once upon a time... She thought she had the answers Yet life knocked her down Having nothing left but prayers Once upon a time... In a few, short years This girl became a woman From emotions and unexpected tears Once upon a time... She realized what was most important You have to cherish your child-hood And you can't be ignoreant Once upon a time... There was an innocent girl Free of heart-ache Not tangeled in this world What don't kill you can only make you stronger... |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
amazing how fast time flies....wishing for the times of carefree innocence......yes, I know  this is really good |
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zarina Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 180 |
Good poem. and it's so true.. I am always myself. Isn't that enough for you? |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I really liked this one Jessica. Awesome job here!!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
Awesome poem, keep up the awesome work. "Right now I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before." |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
This was a wonderful poem. Thank you for the great read! *Amanda* |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
This is a great read! Way to go! Rhonda "Amy, can you PLEASE come to Spain with us so that we have someone to keep Rhonda calm?" - Mr. Ardiel *insert hysterical laughter from me here* |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
true...and this was well said...i enjoyed it...wonderful job!...jess#2 im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I REALLY liked this, Jessica. The whole storyline, and the way you ended with the beginning of the poem was awesome. Nicely done!! --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
I liked this one. Showing the time passing, getting older. I miss life when I was younger, living each day without any worries... Oh well, life goes on. Great job, Jessica. - Cody - |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Jessica #2- Where have you been deary? Come back- reply more. We miss you. HaHa. I agree w/ Marie. The story line here was awesome and I truelly loved how you began and ended this w/ the same stanza. It worked perfectly.  |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
Very good poem! i like the transition you made from start to finish and the sum up with the 2nd las and the last stanza makes such a strong comprassion its like blakc against white, very very good ALLIE |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
this poem is georgous. well done on this one. katie fate can only take you so far, the rest is up to you |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Hey Jess, I simply love this one. As the other said, the storyline was great. I find that repeating the first stanza at the end of a poem can have a nice effect..and this is a perfect example. "Once upon a time... She thought she had the answers Yet life knocked her down Having nothing left but prayers" I've often thought I had the answers, only to find I really don't. But when life knocks you down, you just got to stand up. If it decides to deal you another punch, best to take it standing than to let em hit you when you're down. Anyway, an awesome poem indeed. Later chica -Kosetsu "Love, like the Rose, is desired. And like the Rose, Love has its thorns." - Unknown |
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DarkenedShadow Member
since 2001-07-23
Posts 114Kansas |
Hmmm passing time a poem? Not all people have that ability, maybe I should try to do that myself. Thanks for the awesome poem. /Nick/ |
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