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Heavens Tears
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0 posted 2001-07-10 03:22 PM


This is my 500th post!  Yeah!  So, without futher ado, heres the poem...


I stand before you
only asking for one thing –
acceptance.
No matter what,
you never want to accept me.

But I can wipe away those tears
and permanently paste my fake smile on.
I can cover up the scars,
not only the visible ones
still pink against my pale wrist
but the emotional ones
that reflect in my face and eyes.
I may no longer be myself on the outside,
but it is all still there inside.

The only problem is
you can see inside of me,
while the rest of the world cannot.
But I do not care
for the rest of the worlds approval
only yours…

I turn and walk away
I cannot bring myself to stay
Or to look back into that mirror.



*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.


[This message has been edited by Heavens Tears (edited 07-11-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Heavens Tears - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-07-10 08:51 PM


CONGRATS on 500!!..your a senoir member now!..and...*sighs*...this hit me...sincere emotions...i really liked the poem itself...but hope everything gets better.

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

knightlyshadows
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2 posted 2001-07-10 09:05 PM


wow i loved this. its going into my library. heh we both hit 5oo together and i wrote a poem kinda similar to this one yesterday. newayz! congrats on the 5oo and great job on the poem. i think its great.*hugs*
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes

Spice
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3 posted 2001-07-10 09:59 PM


Wow! Great Write Amanda! I LOVED this! Congrats on your "Senior Member" status too!
LoneWolf
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4 posted 2001-07-10 10:50 PM


Congrats on the 500! This was a great poem. i loved it.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

CwboyAtHeart
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5 posted 2001-07-10 11:29 PM


Congrats on 500!  Maybe someday I'll be up there.  :   Anyway, I really liked the poem, quite emotional.  Well written.

      - Cody -

If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

fozzyozzy
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6 posted 2001-07-10 11:56 PM


Congrats on the big 5 double O.  I've always wondered how you people do it   Great read by the way.  I have to be honest though, and say it didn't hit me that hard, but that's just moi.

"and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings

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7 posted 2001-07-11 12:17 PM


nice poem, congrats on 500!
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8 posted 2001-07-11 12:20 PM


great poem i likes! oh btw you're comment about me and jimmy well just go read my reply to whatever poem it waslol i forgot.
robin

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9 posted 2001-07-11 12:25 PM


This is really good! so sad. Congrats on #500!

Death is but an escape from loneliness

zarina
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10 posted 2001-07-11 04:09 AM


Congrats on 500..   And the poem was very nice.. I could relate to it.

I am always myself. Isn't that enough for you?

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11 posted 2001-07-11 04:11 AM


Great job here....Happy 500! Looks like you and Tiff did it around the same time.
I hope to see you in some of the other forums not that you can access them by being a Senior Member  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

mistic
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12 posted 2001-07-11 12:13 PM


powerful point.... this was very well written, i liked it a lot. great job.
Low Man's Lyric
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13 posted 2001-07-11 01:56 PM


I love your poem, good job. Congrats on 500!

"Right now I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before."
~Steven Wright

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14 posted 2001-07-12 01:51 AM


Oh wow. That's all I have to say: Oh wow!

Rhonda

"Amy, can you PLEASE come to Spain with us so that we have someone to keep Rhonda calm?" - Mr. Ardiel *insert hysterical laughter from me here*

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15 posted 2001-07-15 09:56 PM


Congrats on 500!  Good write, I enjoyed this.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

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16 posted 2001-07-15 09:58 PM


Your ending was harsh and for that it was great. It's a reality for so many people and you've written about it brilliantly. Your own personal pain brings it to life.
Congratulations on your 500.  

~AF~

Psychopathic chickens are plotting against me...

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