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Love's Addiction
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0 posted 2001-07-09 11:00 PM


Deep into the forest.......
they wait and hide...
praying upon the plumage...

Their hidious features....
enough to scare anything...
if only looks could kill....

These horrible beings.....
live in constant fear.......
of being seen by anything........

What are these dark creatures?......
where did they come from?......
and when are they leaving?.....


I can't hold on.....how do u think i've lost so much?....i'm so afraid....i'm outta touch.......-Linkin Park
Don't EVER judge me - Slipknot

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anonymous albert ?
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1 posted 2001-07-10 12:20 PM


i liekd the symbolism...and a VERY though provoking piece  ...i enjoyed it greatly!

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2 posted 2001-07-10 12:44 PM


wow...what an intense piece.  I liked it a lot.  Good job

"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

cherish
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3 posted 2001-07-10 01:41 AM


What are these dark creatures?......
where did they come from?......
and when are they leaving?.....
wow!!..this is awesome!!...i love the elipses...thanx for the great read!!!

"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

Love's Addiction
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4 posted 2001-07-10 08:54 AM


glad u all enjoyed it.

I can't hold on.....how do u think i've lost so much?....i'm so afraid....i'm outta touch.......-Linkin Park
Don't EVER judge me - Slipknot

CwboyAtHeart
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5 posted 2001-07-10 10:21 AM


I liked this one.  The symbolism is really cool.  Keep posting.

      - Cody -

If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

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6 posted 2001-07-10 03:19 PM


Great poem!  And you spelled "hidden" incorrectly, but that can be easily fixed.  Thanks for the great read!

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

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7 posted 2001-07-10 07:41 PM


I really liked the ending to this one. very nice. I thought you did superb on this poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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8 posted 2001-07-19 10:44 PM


I'm just curious on what caused you to write this poem.  What exactly do the creatures symbolize?  A little help would be much appreciated.  

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