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Love's Addiction
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0 posted 2001-07-09 10:21 PM


You've stabbed me in the back,
one to many times.
I'm furious right now,
I can't believe this even rhymes.
You said you liked me,
yet you went after her.
My feelings for you right now,
are in such a blur.
You've broken my heart,
into a thousand tiny peices.
When you finally leave,
is that when all this pain ceases?
Can't you see right now,
all I want is love.
And when my hand fits in your,
just like a perfect glove.........
I thought we had it made,
but I guess you had a surprise for me.
I must have been wrong,
my love you just couldn't see......





I can't hold on.....how do u think i've lost so much?....i'm so afraid....-Linkin Park

[This message has been edited by Love's Addiction (edited 07-10-2001).]

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anonymous albert ?
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1 posted 2001-07-09 10:37 PM


emotionally sad...yet quite powerful...this was expressed well...hope things are better

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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2 posted 2001-07-10 04:40 AM


Wow very sad, but it was very strong......the words hit. nicely done here.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Kicking Kim
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3 posted 2001-07-10 05:30 AM


This was a very emotional poem and it was very well written.  Keep writing!  

^*~Kicking Kim~*^  

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

Love's Addiction
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4 posted 2001-07-10 08:55 AM


hey all, thanks 4 the replies...glad u enjoyed it.

I can't hold on.....how do u think i've lost so much?....i'm so afraid....i'm outta touch.......-Linkin Park
Don't EVER judge me - Slipknot

CwboyAtHeart
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5 posted 2001-07-10 10:23 AM


Quite emotional, I can tell this poem was felt by you.   Sad,yet it was very powerful, and a great poem.  Good job.

      - Cody -

If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

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6 posted 2001-07-10 03:01 PM


Great poem.  It was very emotional.  Keep up the great work.

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

Spice
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since 2001-04-13
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7 posted 2001-07-10 05:42 PM


Wonderful!  

I truelly enjoyed this, Love's Addiction. It was great! So sad, yet strong and filled with emotion.

[This message has been edited by Spice (edited 07-10-2001).]

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8 posted 2001-07-19 12:35 PM


This is so sad.  Hope things are better now.  You'll find someone that'll treat you like a queen.  Thanks for sharing.

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

Hill's_Chatabox
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since 2001-07-10
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9 posted 2001-07-19 12:52 PM


nice, way to share such strong emotions, I really enjoyed it. I have been there,just never knew how to express my emotions.
thanks for the read.
    ~Hill~

Shoot for the moon cause if you miss you'll still end up in the *stars*!!!

Don't tell me that you love me unless you mean it, Beacuse I might do so

Shygirl82
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10 posted 2001-07-19 06:29 PM


This was great...eventhough it was sad...it was so very powerful.  I am glad you realized that this person's feelings werent true, eventhough I know it has to hurt.  I hope things get better and much luck to ya!
~Nikki~

It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them.

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