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Save a little love for me.
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Save a little love for me. |
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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
I’ll be back as soon as I can I’ll be back to hold your hand I’ll be back tomorrow So baby save a little love for me. I’ll be home from this city I’ll be home hoping you miss me I’ll be home tonight So baby save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. So baby save a little love for me. I‘ll be gone for the weekend I’ll miss you but it’s not the end I’m be home on Monday So baby save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. So baby save a little love for me. It’s so cold when I’m gone Cause I’m not where I belong One more night and I’m home again I’ll be home again…. So baby save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. So baby save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. So baby save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. Save a little love for me. |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
let me see... what i gather from this poem, especially the last 17 lines is that you want thsi person to save a little love for you? LOL this is okay, i think it could do without so much repetition especially where you wrote the "save a little love for me" choruses so many times. i couldn't concentrate on the verses haha but oh well... this ain't bad.... Valerie "...And i want to take you down, but your soul could not be found, doesn't matter much you see cause your disease is killing me..." -Saliva [This message has been edited by ~sugarpie313~ (edited 07-09-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I hope she does save a little love for you. I liked this one.....I usually just put a (x3) or something....like save a little love for me x8 Saves up space....but anyhow. I liked this one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
okies me likes this poem! baby i'll save more than a little love for ya lol great poem! robin I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL! |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Hey, I thought this one was really good. I agree, it could do without so much repetition. I won't save a lil love for u, tho, I've already given it all away.  - Cody - |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Honestly, I didnt care for the repitition all that much, but if this was a song maybe I would like it. That is just what it seemed like to me. *Amanda* |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
beautiful job on the song..very sweet and nice  ...i esp liked the emotions.im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
thats some great lyrics there. Hope you get it back thanks for sharinghi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
It sounds like a barry white song or the song "midnight train to georgia" i liked it, hope a little bit of love is saved for you. REgina |
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