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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
The light around you blinds. No-one is worthy of staring it in the eye, it flashes its dubious glow and lets nobody past through sight nor through soul. It flickers in the wind, like a candle losing its shine, but never does it burn out. Instead it lures me, enticing me with passionate kisses and I will not turn away from this powerful opportunity. I wait in the darkness, in hope that one day, your blooming light will be blinded by my dullest sense of hope. "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
this was really great. I think it was the first I've read of your poems (sorry, I haven't been around for a while) and I really liked it. Keep it up. I'm looking forward to reading more! Alyssa  I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish) |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
Thanks Allysa, this was a very posotive first reply from you and I am grateful when people read my poetry for the first time and appreciate it. Thankyou very much, hope to see more of your poems around here soon too! ^*~Kicking Kim~*^  "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
I love the way you wrote this! it is a great poem I am lucky to say that i was able to have read it, Thank ya! ~*Freedom Is Not Free*~ (Korean War Memorial) |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
This was a great poem. The title caught my eye b/c I have one by the same title, but this just proves how different 2 poems w/ the same title can be. Nicely done! *Amanda* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done here Kim....not my fav by you, but still a good one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
i really liked the imagery in this poem |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
I liked this alot Kim. Great write.  |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
wrintten very nicely  ...i enjoyed the expression...great job!im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You did good. I personally prefer your others but your poems still have so much strength in them. keep it up. hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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Starnite Junior Member
since 2001-07-05
Posts 41Wisconsin |
Good job. I like this on a lot.**Sarah |
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DarkenedShadow Member
since 2001-07-23
Posts 114Kansas |
the word I want to use is excellent and I hope that i see more of this later on, this is giving me a great start here, thanks. /Nick/ |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Nice job on this Kim. You had some good lines in your piece. Mind you, you might want to work on the strength aspect of it because when read, it lacks a bit of oomph. Thanks for tje read. ~AF~ "Reality is just a crutch for people who can't cope with drugs." -- Robin Williams |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
I really enjoyed this... What don't kill you can only make you stronger... |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
this reminded me of a moth drawing to a flame or a light bulb..those stupid things dont know anything do they? i liked this one a lot..and im sorry for saying that they are stupid..but they are!.. thanks for sharing "I hope my mum and I hope my dad |
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