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zarina
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0 posted 2001-07-09 04:33 AM


Everytime I fall in love
It ends up with all this pain
Always when future's looking brigth
The sun is suddenly out of sigth
I don't get used to it
How many times must I go through this?
How many times?

It scares me
That when I fall in love
I get so naive
Like I'm in a dreamworld
With pretty,pink skies
I get so very foolish
I always belive
My eyes are blinded
I can't see
It's always a shock
When I get back to reality

And then I'm down again
Licking my scars, healing my hurts
I try to get whole again
Each time
Is just as bad

I don't feel like learn of it
Cause I do the same mistake over again
Falling in love - it always leaves me crying
brings me too much pain
I may be young, yet I'm already tired of it
Tired of crying
Tired of pain
How many times must this happen?
Will I learn?
When will I grow and go on?

Each time I get hurt
I lose something inside
A part of me
Never healed
Doesn't come back
It's lost forever
The hurt fades with time
but it leaves an empty room
A little black hole
in my soul

What's it worth, all this pain?
Isn't it a kind of high-priced?
What do I earn from it?
What will I learn?
Is this how I will grow?

I am always myself. Isn't that enough for you?

© Copyright 2001 zarina - All Rights Reserved
the_rescue
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1 posted 2001-07-09 09:20 AM


good stuff I like it. it flowed well for the most part it did have some week spots but over all the poem was really good.

we fall like the stars then rise like the sun..Repentence.Forgiveness.We are blame worthy hold us to our wrongs..but don't hold our wrongs against us

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2 posted 2001-07-09 03:47 PM


This was very nice.  Your poems are so emotional.  I guess that is why I like them so much!

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

Spice
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3 posted 2001-07-09 04:07 PM


Great job, Zarina.  
I ecspecially liked the line about licking your scars. That one really stood out for me.
As far as learning and growing from all these heartaches- You are...You just don't realize it. ONE DAY Zarina...one day someone won't leave you heartbroken and you will see that it was all worth it. ( I know, Don't you just wish that damn day would hurry up? I know I do... ) ANyway- I liked this alot.  

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4 posted 2001-07-09 07:01 PM


Well I personally grow from pain.....I dont know about you zarina. Anyhow, I enjoyed this. I hope things work out for you.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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5 posted 2001-07-10 12:35 PM


indeed you grow from pain...this showed a lot of pain...i hope you find true love that wont hurt soon

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Fading Away
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6 posted 2001-07-15 07:59 PM


It IS high priced, but just as Albert said, you grow from every hurt.  Love is confusing... and everyone wonders if the pain and heartbreak is worth sujecting oneself to that.  But in the end, it always is.  It's that quote: "Should I cry because it's over, or smile because it happened?"  Give that some thought   *hugs* I know it hurts.  But time will heal it.  Stay strong.  Wonderful work, here.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

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7 posted 2001-08-02 09:24 AM


I've noticed that all your poems have shown such heart break and sadness.  I just hope thing do get better for you.  Just be strong cause it's on it's way.

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

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8 posted 2001-08-02 10:52 AM


This was great, except for all the sadness  . I hope everything turns out for the better.

"Right now I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before."
~Steven Wright

zarina
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9 posted 2001-08-02 03:02 PM


thanks alot. well, I know most my poems are dark..but Im okay   don't worry!

I am always myself. Isn't that enough for you?

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