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0 posted 2001-07-08 06:15 PM


Uuuhuu girl there is something you should know.
I’m in love with you.

Been dreaming about you all the time
You’re so lovely in the night.
Got my knees aging uh it’s true
Can’t help it there’s something about you
That makes me lose track of time
You really blow my mind.

Uuuhuu girl there is something you should know.
I’m in love with you.
Uuuhuu girl there is something you should know.
I’m in love with you.
Uuuhuu girl there is something you should know.
I’m in love with you.
Uuuhuu girl there is something you should know.
I’m in love with you.

Can’t control my heart any more
Cause your prettier than before.
And every time you look at me.
Can’t help it you’ve got something extreme
That makes me lose track of time
You really blow my mind.

Uuuhuu girl there is something you should know.
I’m in love with you.
Uuuhuu girl there is something you should know.
I’m in love with you.
Uuuhuu girl there is something you should know.
I’m in love with you.
Uuuhuu girl there is something you should know.
I’m in love with you.

I’d like to take a sip, of your lovely lips.
I can see you smile, lights up your eyes.
You make me lose track of time
You really blow my mind.

Uuuhuu girl there is something you should know.
I’m in love with you.
Uuuhuu girl there is something you should know.
I’m in love with you.
Uuuhuu girl there is something you should know.
I’m in love with you.
Uuuhuu girl there is something you should know.
I’m in love with you.


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1 posted 2001-07-08 09:21 PM


Hmm...could this be a song?   Pretty good...expressive...basic... I wish I could write a song.

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2 posted 2001-07-08 09:54 PM


Nice Song.  
I hope you told the girl how ya felt.

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3 posted 2001-07-09 01:37 AM


I liked this one. I think these are the keys to hit songs.....little catch phrases. Uuhuuu is a sound that is catchy and i liked it. Nicely done here.

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I admire it daily

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4 posted 2001-07-09 03:54 PM


I too am guessing this is a song.  It is very nice.  I think whoever you wrote this for would like it.

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to fly like the birds... to be set free.

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5 posted 2001-07-15 07:45 PM


well done with the song.  You did really good.  Thanks for sharing.

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

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6 posted 2001-07-16 03:13 AM


your songs are always nice to read...i enjoyed thisone as well...great job!

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