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Words_of_Glitter Member
since 2000-10-25
Posts 90USA |
Does it make me a bad person if I wanted you to fall in love... Knowing that I couldn't return the devotion Really didn't feel any emotion Wanted to hold your heart in the palm of my hand Let you buy me dinner and try to get to know my inner-self All the while, not worrying about your heart and how I'd have to break it (sooner or later) Just because I kissed you Doesn't mean that I am going to miss you Never one for long-distance relationships (Or relationships of any kind, for that matter) Do you think I have no heart and that my actions are unkind? When I wanted you to be mine... But never wanted to be yours I try to tell myself that what I'm doing isn't so bad; That you really won't be sad when I finally let you know That I was only in love with the thought of being loved (I never really loved you at all) Maybe I'd be so lucky and you would think that it was worth it I am trying to make you happy... Trying to make you glad that you got to spend some time with me Making myself think that I am the girl of your dreams Love the idea that at our twenty year high school reunion you'll back me into a corner and whisper that you've loved me all the time Do I just want someone to fall back on? Not wanting to be alone But just trying to be on my own I wish that I could believe all those things I said to you before you left... (But I really just wish that when you come back, you don't expect much from me) Hopefully you'll meet someone new and forget about me (Though that's really not what I want) But you do deserve better "Do not marry the one that you can live with. Marry the one you cannot live without." |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
oo i liked this. lots of emotion. think u did a good job here. i loved this part: 'That you really won't be sad when I finally let you know That I was only in love with the thought of being loved' that happens to often i think. hope all is well. tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Whoa...mega deja vu. I went through something just like that not too long ago. I never really gave it much thought though. I'm glad to have read your poem.. kind of made me look back on myself. Thank you.. I enjoyed it. Be kind, be true, be bold, be you. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Can I answer for the guy, Sarah? haha...Thats a HORRIBLE thing to do.... People's emotions aren't a toy...  BUT- I did enjoy the read. Vry nicely done. |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
let me speak from the guy's point of view… women like you is what makes us players and pimps as we men grow older. our hearts harden, and we learn not to respect women. when I was younger and in HS I used to wonder why we(guys) tended to think like players, but now that Im in college, and a frat brother, I can have the experience to look back on it all, and see that this kind of thing was the root of it all. Once he figures out that you played him, he'll never respect a woman again(at least not anytime soon) |
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Words_of_Glitter Member
since 2000-10-25
Posts 90USA |
Hey, if I wanted love advice, I would've posted at the Therapy Board, ummmmkay? But thanks for taking the time to read. "Do not marry the one that you can live with. Marry the one you cannot live without." |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought the poem displayed your emotions very well, but I despise the actions that took place in this poem. I think it's cruel and heartless........but oh well. If you'd like to talk about this in private i'd be willing because I have a lot to say about it   I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Words_of_Glitter Member
since 2000-10-25
Posts 90USA |
blah "Time really does fly by and no one knows where it goes, so if you have something to say or do, say or do it now." |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I don't like this one as much as I have enjoyed some of your other work. Thanks for sharing it with us jsut the same. I look forward to reading more. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
"That you really won't be sad when I finally let you know That I was only in love with the thought of being loved" the part Tiff...brought up with...well...taht hit me hard!...this poem showed much emotions...the meaning behind this poem is a interetsing one...i enjoyed it a lot...and i think you expressed it well [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 07-16-2001).] |
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holatuwol Member
since 2001-04-27
Posts 72California, USA |
*decides to give this poem a little nudge towards the top of the to-read list* At first, I didn't read the poem because the title didn't seem to ring well... but you know, after reading it, perhaps I should take a look at the other poems with the more commonplace titles. In ways, it fit... in ways it didn't... but overall, the poem was certainly a wonderful read and I regret overlooking it the first time because of it's title. ^_^ Can't judge a book by its cover, eh? You know, I thought this poem had the perfect feeling to it... really detached and distant throughout the entire read. And there's also even a faint hint of repetition in it that's not really blatantly obvious, but sort of in a more subtle sort of way. Lots of repeated ideas and emotions, giving the poem a strange internal cyclic flow. ^_^v The echo of the poem was tranquil, yet confused (I *love* paradoxical feelings), which complimented the emotions that seemed to be traveling through the poem... all in all, I thought this was a marvelous read. Despite the fact that sometimes it seems like the actions which are conveyed in this poem are cruel, I thought it comes naturally with any romantic endeavor... no reason to get hyped up about it, eh? Definitely one of those rare gemstones in Passions these days which made a personal impact on me... not many poems successfully do that, and fewer still which are written in free-style verse. ^_^v Excellent job, and certainly hope to see more of your works in the future. Until next time... - holatuwol |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Meep... This was deep...(did i just rhyme? geez...meep doesn't even exist) I really liked this, the emotions and all (I like the "()") Hope to see more from you! -Hael Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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Words_of_Glitter Member
since 2000-10-25
Posts 90USA |
Holatuwol...not sure if I got your name right, sorry, if I didn't, but anyways, I really appreciated your comments! They meant a lot and I felt that your comments were a good read. Most people just write..I liked it and so on...but you really made me feel good and it sort of made me feel like there really is someone out there who enjoys my work and even though I enjoy reading my own poems, it is always better to know that they are understood and enjoyed by others. People like you make me want to do more with my poems...broaden my horizons and publish maybe. Thank you very much. You really don't understand how deeply I felt your words. =) "Time really does fly by and no one knows where it goes, so if you have something to say or do, say or do it now." |
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