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0 posted 2001-07-08 03:09 AM


I havent seen you in 6 months
Havent heard from you in four
now there you are so suddenly
standing at my door

Do you think ill open up?
Do you think I still love you?
Do you think ill call you dad again
after all youve put me through?

You've hurt me way too many times,
youve caused me too much pain.
you still think ill open up my heart
so you can rip it out again?

You werent there to dry my tears
when others broke my heart
you have never loved me,Rob
And i know that you wont start

Rob, go back where you came from
to your girlfriend and your weed
because to have you in my life
is the last thing that I need.


Death is but an escape from loneliness

© Copyright 2001 Brittany Mcpeak - All Rights Reserved
TopGunLauren
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1 posted 2001-07-08 03:13 AM


This is a really great poem keep up the awsome work!
  Lauren

CwboyAtHeart
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2 posted 2001-07-08 03:23 AM


Really good poem.  Sucks to have somebody not talk to you anymore...  But it seems like this might almost be for the better?  Keep up the great work


      - Cody -

If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

[This message has been edited by CwboyAtHeart (edited 07-08-2001).]

CwboyAtHeart
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3 posted 2001-07-08 03:23 AM


Really good poem.  Sucks to have somebody not talk to you anymore...  But it seems like this might almost be for the better?  Keep up the great work

      - Cody -

If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

[This message has been edited by CwboyAtHeart (edited 07-08-2001).]

Spice
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4 posted 2001-07-08 03:59 AM


Britt- I really liked this.
Very strong.
I liked how you called him Rob instead of Dad. It made perfect sense. And as hard as it may be, and as guilty as you may feel at times- you are doing the right thing by not letting him back into your life. My mother told me that You could forgive someone but not open yourself up to be hurt. Being cautious I guess. Don't allow him to be a repeat offender of causing you pain. Nice Read Britt.

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5 posted 2001-07-08 10:49 AM


Powerful, very powerful. I'm so sorry tho, if this is true for you, what a terrible situation to be in. I won't even pretend to be able to relate to your pain, but good luck.  

Jenn

"Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill

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6 posted 2001-07-08 11:17 AM


Hey,

    Ms. Mcpeak, this is very powerful, I hope you can oneday forgive him and he straightens out. Good poem   haven't seen you in a while start posting more often  

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7 posted 2001-07-08 01:02 PM


Hey Brittany, I am glad to see you back at Passions.  Its been a while.  This was a powerful poem.  I know how ya feel.  Some people deserve a second chance, but from what I have heard, Rob doesnt.  

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

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8 posted 2001-07-09 06:38 PM


I liked this one.....it's sad though how things ended up turning out. I wish you the best of luck.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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9 posted 2001-07-16 09:49 AM


It's always sad to see people go thru the mistakes in chocies that their parents have made.  I don't personally know what you're going thru, but I can honestly say that at least I know it hurts.  Just keep this in mind, everyone deserves a second change ya know. We all have our own mistakes/faults. Hope things get better *hugs*

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