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knightlyshadows
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obscured vision

0 posted 2001-07-06 10:28 PM


tears must be shed
im living after ive died
my life is waiting for me
ordinary but nothing the same
doesnt anybody hear me?
too busy to listen it seems
im the greatest fan of you
but its been awhile since i told you
maybe im just not ready
ive had a bad day
or is that just life?
not that you would understand
avoidance of this emotion you release
memories of where we lead them
where we left them behind
dont leave me to myself
theres nothing more i can take
i cry at these images
black and white they flash
is anybody there?
i watch my faith slip away
im alive, ill survive
sleeping away tomorrow
too weak to stop the flow
life is waiting for me
drowning in all, yet i live
i know everything
i knew it at one time, i promise?
im not responsible
this is too much
a relationship of ice
one wrong step and it cracks
toghether there is nothing we cant do
i dont have alot to offer you
but here i am
looking in from this corner
where i hide everything thats me
all this time, time is nothing
i can see through the lies
yet i waste all this time
im in the dark living this hell
cumbersome entrapment that i live
united i stand alone in my finest hours
this will be an uncertain time
theres a place for me to wait
so i wait for the tide to come in
with everystep its farther away it seems
ill never make it back to how far weve come
how ever this happens, just remember
its whatever makes you happy
i couldnt change for you
im sorry, i didnt mean to


“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes


[This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 07-06-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Tiffany Durham - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-07-07 01:35 PM


Great work I really enjoyed the read, and remember there are always people willing to listen to you here at Pip and if you want to talk you could e-mail me at Targetmrzu@hotmail.com

Anyway great work on the poetry I thought you did well expressing yourself.
Zu

"Here we are again finding ourselves at the end Of the wrong stick I guess it's far too late I'm building up the barricades In my head" -My Vitriol

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2 posted 2001-07-07 02:01 PM


the expression of your feelings was heartfelt Tiff ...i hope everythings, ok though...

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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3 posted 2001-07-07 03:40 PM


You did a wonderful job expressing all of your feelings and emotions in this poem.  Keep up the great work Tiff!

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

Spice
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4 posted 2001-07-07 10:25 PM


Wow...Tiff. This was amazing.
an absolutely amazing free verse.
You expressed yourself wonderfully.
I liked the last 2 lines the best.

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5 posted 2001-07-08 03:12 AM


You express your emotions nicely in your poem.Keep up the awsome work!
  Lauren

Ina
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6 posted 2001-07-08 12:39 PM


This was emotinally charged. It was sad. ut it was an amazing poem.


Regina

If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive.

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7 posted 2001-07-09 01:25 AM


Nicely done here tiff!
I really thought you did awesome on this one.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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8 posted 2001-07-14 12:32 PM


Tiff, you have always been consistent with yur poems
Another great one as usual
Seems like you haven't been sharing much lately though
Hope you be as busy in pip as before
thanks for sharing

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

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9 posted 2001-07-15 03:13 AM


WOW Tiff, this is wonderful! You've written this beautifully revealing all of the emotions and the pain.
Thanks for this eye opening read.  

~AF~

Psychopathic chickens are plotting against me...

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10 posted 2001-07-16 02:53 AM


I really liked this one, Tiff.
Very heartfelt words, here.  VERY nicely done  

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

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