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If Only You Knew |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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I don't say "hi" when I walk through the door, I only say "did anyone call?" Anyone being you. I don't try and go back to my old 'hood, unless I call and make sure you're there, because you're the one I want to see. If only you knew what I can't tell you, I'm sure you'd see me differently, in a different kind of light. If only you knew you're my angel, the one who protects me, the one who watches over me. If only you knew that I love you, but you'll never know that for sure, because I'm not going to tell you. If only you could look inside my soul, and see all the thoughts I'm dying to tell you, see all the words I'm dying to say. If only I could open my mouth instead of sitting there in silence, then maybe my life wouldn't be this way. I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish) |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
This is such an awssome poem and it is very well written.You poem has a very deep message and I understand it completely keep up the awsome work! Lauren |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
I liked this alot, Allysa. You expressed yourself very well. By God! SOMEHOW I am going to give you the courage to tell this guy how you feel! If it's the last thing I do! hehehe.. Ally, he'll never know how you feel unless you tell him- as hard as it may be. ( And boy is it ever hard.) I enjoyed this bunches. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Nicely done, Allysa. However, if this situation is tearing you up inside, then JUST TELL HIM! I hope you find the courage... It's not fun to go through years of wondering "what if...?" Nicely done, I enjoyed this. Good luck on the situation. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
...this hit home for me...loving it all the way...as i wanted to let this same emotions out but couldnt or havent put it into words... "If only you could look inside my soul, and see all the thoughts I'm dying to tell you, see all the words I'm dying to say." awesome job on writing this...thanks for sharing it...i realted to this  ..as i try to tell how i feel but its "me"..all the complications thats holding me back...i know how it truly feels...yout not alone.[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 07-07-2001).] |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Nice job! I especially liked the lines that anonymous albert had already pointed out. I agree with Marie also. Tell him! But I know that is easier said than done, so I wont say it again OK? *Amanda* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very nicely done here Allysa, you always prove to write wonderful poetry.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
thanks ya all! And Mr. Sexy, thank you very much. So you're "most huggable" huh? Better watch out, cause here I come...... *wraps Dopey in 1,679,786,789 bear hugs untill his face is red.* u sure u wanna be most huggable? |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Allysa, this is such a good poem. I do hope you don't hold yourself back though Say what it is you have to say Don't let the moment pass you by You might regret it Thanks for the read hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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