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Wood_Stock
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0 posted 2001-07-06 09:29 AM



- Courage to step forward -


A world sits at my fingertips,
Waiting to be explored.
And exciting future, a day away,
Thoughts, not to be ignored.

But with every new adventure,
Time comes to prepare.
And the reluctant explorer, which I am,
Slowly climbs these stairs.

For the excitement that awaits,
Is what I'd love to see.
Though deep inside, a fear remains,
Of what may cease to be.

The comfort of the present,
All that's here and now.
When the wings are spread, feathers fall,
Scared it might be lost somehow.

Yet, the bird would never fly,
If it feared to hit the ground.
And the fish would never swim,
If it feared to sink and drown.

I'm sure there is a lesson here,
Through passages unfurled.
Take a breath, spread your wings and fly,
And experience the world.



Thanks for the advice, Ive made a few changes.  I don't know if it's been saved, but it's a bit easier on the mind when reading.. heh heh...

Wood_Stock.

[This message has been edited by Wood_Stock (edited 07-08-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-07-06 09:49 AM


yes!!! Spread your wings and fly...... your time is now, enjoy it, savour it and make good choices so you'll have beautiful memories, not regrets   I loved this!  
Spice
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2 posted 2001-07-06 07:15 PM


Hi Noel.  
I really loved this.
A wonderful message.
Keep posting.

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3 posted 2001-07-06 10:47 PM


This was well written, Noel.  The flow was excellent until the 4th stanza.  The second line there threw the flow, and from then until the end the flow was broken many times.  something maybe to fix.
The context of this poem was excellent.  Wonderful words, and beautiful thoughts.  Nicely done, indeed.  enjoyed, as always.  

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

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4 posted 2001-07-07 03:02 PM


i loved this...very well written..with very beautiful discriptions and with a inspring message...enjoyed greatly

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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5 posted 2001-07-07 03:05 PM


Great job Noel.  I especially enjoyed the first stanza.  Keep up the great writing!

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

LoneWolf
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6 posted 2001-07-08 12:59 PM


This was awesome. i loved this. great job.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

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7 posted 2001-07-09 06:41 PM


Very nicely done here. I really liked this one Noel. A poem well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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8 posted 2001-07-16 09:53 AM


Your last lines says it all.
Thanks for the wonderful read
keep it up

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