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0 posted 2001-07-06 01:25 AM


You've done it again
I gave you my heart once,you dropped it
I thought i was an accident
A simple mistake
So i picked up the pieces
I used a little duct tape
and it was all better.

I handed to back to you
sure that you wouldnt make the same mistake twice
but then you showed me
that you had made no mistake
for again you let my heart fall to the ground
and you dug your heel into it

Now my heart is shattered
and i see no reason
to pick up the pieces
for if i do
and i give it away again
there is no guarantee
that it wont again be thrown to the floor
and if that happens
where is the guarantee
that the damage wont be irreparable?
So i will let my heart lie
broken,but undisturbed.

Death is but an escape from loneliness

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1 posted 2001-07-06 01:29 AM


very sad...I'm sorry you got hurt....they won't all hurt ya know   Hugs   SEA
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2 posted 2001-07-06 01:34 AM


sad indeed...hope everythings alright...great job on writing it out

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3 posted 2001-07-06 01:36 AM


Yep, You're gonna have to (And you'll probably want to) put the pieces of your heart back together. Some prince charming will come along and he'll even help. I'm sorry this guy treated you wrong. I'm sure he'll regret it.   Nice read!
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4 posted 2001-07-06 02:42 AM


ouch this made me sad just reading it. im sorry about all this, but atleast its made you grow and you have the experience under your belt. keep a smile on your face because it wont get any worse, just better   and use superglue instead of duct tape..it works better  

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5 posted 2001-07-06 03:27 AM


This is a crappy situation to be in and it takes a long time to heal a broken heart.  The "duct tape" part did bring a smile to my face though and hopefully in time a smile will be brought to yours.  Excellent poem
~Nikki~

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6 posted 2001-07-06 04:47 PM


This was an incredibly sad poem I feel much sympathy for you if this is a poem about yourself.  Sorry you have been hurt this way.  The structure of the poem was strong and the rhythm well thought out.  Keep writing!

  

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[This message has been edited by Kicking Kim (edited 07-06-2001).]

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7 posted 2001-07-06 06:02 PM


I'm sorry you have been hurt and it will take awhile to put the pieces of your broken heart back together.Having your heart broken is a very tough thing to deal with but in the end it will make you stronger.This is a fantastic poem and very well written.I hope everything in your life gets better and that your heart will e able to heal.
  lauren

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8 posted 2001-07-06 10:59 PM


I'm sorry that you've been hurt.  I know your hearts hurts more than words can say right now, and I'm not saying it won't take time to mend that... soon enough, you'll slowly, but surely, begin to feel better.  Trust me, as much as it hurts, the pain won't stay forever.  There will be another prince charming who will sweep you off your feet   Until he comes, keep smiling   Nicely done on the poem.  Writing always helps, does it not?  Keep sharing your work with us.

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9 posted 2001-07-08 02:19 AM


The way you explained heart break in this poem was awesome. You wrote this piece very well. One of my favs by you. I simply loved this poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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10 posted 2001-07-08 02:01 PM


i really loved this. its awesome. great work.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

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11 posted 2001-07-12 10:06 PM


I'm so sorry you have t go thru something like this. *hugs*
Be strong and keep that head up
thanks for the read

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