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zarina
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0 posted 2001-07-05 11:16 AM


I'm lying in my bed
Wishing you were here
My hand runs over the sheet
It's almost like I expect you to be there
And can't figure out why you're not
It's almost like I can hear your breathing
..Feel your skin

What I feel for you
It scares me
I care so much
I need you so much
Sometimes I even see you
When you're not really here
Out on the street
Or sitting in a chair
I see your smile
It seems so clear
Althrough I know you're not there
And you never were...

I have never seen you
Never held you
Never falled asleep in your arms
Never touched you
Yet somehow, we know each other so well
I know your voice
The way you laugh
The way you cry
Even how your voice sound when you smile

We cant be together
It's too many things
We cant work it out
Not now..
You say you will wait
Should I belive you?
Im afraid that in some years
All is changed
And I will lose you..
It's not what I want.

I don't know what to do
Feel like Im drowning
I think about you all the time
I miss you
Long to be whit you
To sleep by your side
By now, you mean so much to me
I can't let you go
but yet, I cant wait forever
When will you be here?
Will you ever be here?
I know nothing
You ask me to stay strong
I wonder, for how long?
Cant wait to see you
Cant wait to hold you
Cant wait to love you

And I shiver...
I fear tomorrow..
Another day I must face.
Alone.

Whitout you.


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1 posted 2001-07-05 12:07 PM


This was pretty good, Carina.  I enjoyed the poem, and the emotions.  You prtrayed such pain.. very sad.  Nice work.  Keep sharing your work with us  

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2 posted 2001-07-05 12:08 PM


this was interesting..
enjoyable read...if you wanted to you could of made this much darker..
but u did a good JOB!

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Spice
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3 posted 2001-07-05 12:18 PM


Zarina- You have to be one of my favorite poets on PIP right now. I love your work.
This was , yet another, Fantastic write.

"I don't know what to do
Feel like Im drowning
I think about you all the time
I miss you
Long to be with you"

Yet another poem of yours I feel as though I can relate to. Keep posting.  

CwboyAtHeart
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4 posted 2001-07-05 04:36 PM


Wow, that one was really good.  I can relate to this one a little bit...  I really enjoy reading your poems.  Keep postin!  

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5 posted 2001-07-06 02:19 AM


great poem...i loved this poem...and the last verses..just..wOW...the whole poem..protrayed so much  ...i enjoyed this one greatly.

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6 posted 2001-07-06 02:33 AM


this is only the 2nd poem ive read by you but i really like your style. so strong and emotional. great job, i definetly look forward to reading more so keep posting

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zarina
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7 posted 2001-07-06 12:22 PM


Thanks alot..  
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8 posted 2001-07-07 04:01 AM


In the end of the poem, when you say "and I shiver".....I know that shiver like it was a regular body function for me. I know it too well.
I really liked this poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Wood_Stock
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9 posted 2001-07-07 10:26 AM


Hmmm....

Well, first of all, I gather you are talking about someone who is not real?

(or is it someone you can never have... hmmm.. *strikes thoughtful pose*..!)

Anyway, I spose it doesn't matter much, apart from the fact, I feel the same quite often.  Infact, it was kinda scary reading what I felt (somewhat) coming from another person...  Though I feel it about my girlfriend.  Anyway that's another stroy I won't bore you with....

I thought this was a brillient poem.  And if it's not your best (I think someone said), then I am greatly looking forward to reading something better... heh heh.

Anyway.  I'm off.

Wood_Stock.

zarina
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10 posted 2001-07-07 10:52 AM


wood_stock: Oh, he is real enough.. It's just that I've never met him. And to be in love with someone you've never seen, that's just.. patetic. I feel a little stupid, heh.. don't know if I ever will meet him..but I guess I will.. Well. It's kind of a long story..

Rest of you folks: Thank you, Thank you, Thank you for responding  

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11 posted 2001-07-07 12:07 PM


Wow, this was a poem full of emotion and very well structured, you should be very proud!  Keep writing



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LoneWolf
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12 posted 2001-07-08 12:35 PM


I loved this. Great job here.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

fearing-laughter
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13 posted 2001-07-12 06:18 AM


~~zarina~~
hey wonderful poem =) don't feel pathetic, a lot of people love others they have never met.  the person i love most lives in alabama while i live in wisconsin, but that doesn't mean that i can't still love him.  great work on this one, and i hope ya figure this all out.
-fear-

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14 posted 2001-07-25 10:57 AM


Your poem shows such feelings in em.  I feel so bad that you're in such a situation.  Things do get better ya know.  hang in there.  thanks for the beautiful read.

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15 posted 2001-07-25 12:07 PM


This, like most of your poems, was very emotional.  I really enjoyed it.  Great job!
Chel
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16 posted 2001-07-25 12:55 PM


This was beautiful and seemed very emotional.  I hope that you find that special someone.  Until then keep up the great work.

Chel

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"You are special and unique in your own way." "Your FAITH is all you need"

DarkenedShadow
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17 posted 2001-07-25 03:37 PM


This seemed to show something as in you know there is something there but you just can't touch it. It added a display of emotional when that was there. /Nick/
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