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DarkAngelOfTheStars
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since 2001-04-21

Posts 255

0 posted 2001-07-04 10:39 PM

ok yeah this really isnt that good i could probaby do a lot better but this is how i feel right now and i kinda have writers block still so yeah here it is....

Walking down this street
It has become dark and cold
I’m not sure where I’m going
Maybe home
This pain has become so intense
It’s useless
Like me
The scars on my soul
I now wear on my flesh
Untold stories
Of unknown pain
My heart is bleeding
My emotions become numb
I can’t feel love or hate
I’m not sad or happy
I’m Just me
I have no hopes or dreams
I just want to be home

story of my life: I am so self destructive, I turn solutions into problems. Everything i thouch i ruin. Im midas in reverse

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

1 posted 2001-07-05 01:06 AM

"My heart is bleeding
My emotions become numb
I can’t feel love or hate
I’m not sad or happy
I’m Just me"

I loved that part. I can relate so much to that.
Excellent write Kat.

[This message has been edited by Spice (edited 07-05-2001).]

the_rescue
Member

since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

2 posted 2001-07-05 08:29 AM

I really liked it that was good and I know what you mean there well just from talking to you basically anyways, I'll talk to you later hey and chin up.

I'm not asking U 2 luv me I'm just letting out the truth no hold barred about what I feel nothing wrong with what I say

branden726

Senior Member

since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

3 posted 2001-07-05 10:32 AM

It was a good poem dont get me wrong but i get a negitive vibe off it somehow and i was wondering if there was much feeling in this as i thought or is it just something that came up? well nice poem.

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

4 posted 2001-07-05 10:36 AM

Great work DAOTS, I really enjoyed the read although I did feel that this was not as good as others that I have read from you, but still a very good read.

Andrew

"Here we are again finding ourselves at the end Of the wrong stick I guess it's far too late I'm building up the barricades In my head" -My Vitriol

Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

5 posted 2001-07-05 11:53 AM

Nice piece!

JBaker515

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since 2001-02-28

Posts 458
Dartmouth College

6 posted 2001-07-05 11:54 AM

ya this was nice........

Heavens Tears

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since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

7 posted 2001-07-05 11:58 AM

This pain has become so intense
It’s useless
Like me
The scars on my soul
I now wear on my flesh
Untold stories
Of unknown pain

These lines were great. I hope that you are using the scars symbolically. This was a wonderful poem, especially for a person w/ writers block. We should open a hospital around here for writers block...

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

8 posted 2001-07-06 02:46 AM

*sighs*...this hit home for me...and hit me hard...so much i realted to...i loved the poem

...i think you did well on expressing these feelings.

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Kicking Kim
Member

since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

9 posted 2001-07-06 11:22 AM

This was a very strong and original poem. I liked it very much especially the part which Spice pointed out. Keep writing!

^*~Kicking Kim~*^

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

10 posted 2001-07-06 11:16 PM

"The scars on my soul
I now wear on my flesh
Untold stories
Of unknown pain"

Wow.. this really hit home - hard. Wonderful work, here. I really enjoyed this, DAOTS. Keep posting all your work.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

11 posted 2001-07-07 04:19 AM

I thought this was fine.....not my favorite from you, but it was still an emotional write which I did like.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

zarina
Member

since 2001-05-19

Posts 180

12 posted 2001-07-07 02:15 PM

this was good. I think I'll put it in my library. It's like.. It's not that long, but yet it says it all.. I cant explain it, but I liked it very much.

LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

13 posted 2001-07-08 12:44 PM

This was good, i could relate. I liked this.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

14 posted 2001-07-08 12:49 PM

It’s useless
Like me
The scars on my soul
I now wear on my flesh
Untold stories
Of unknown pain

Those were my favorite lines. I could relate. it hit me hard. Awesome poem.

Regina

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

15 posted 2001-07-13 09:39 AM

You have written this poem really well. Don't we all just wanna find home? Hope you find it

Thanks for sharing

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