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thedarkangel Member
since 2001-05-12
Posts 74~*~the cutest~*~ |
crazy and sexy mad and cool fluffy handcuffs dan makes me drool Kathryn, Tols and bekki Xfm and Punk Rock gigs manic moshing and getting drunk painkillers and broken ribs A softer and a sweeter side flowers and bright pink skirts choir contests and singing exams deemed "crazy lady" yet a subtle flirt Blink182, Green Day, incubus, KoRn "god bless kurt cobain" a rocking bassist not content to throw her life down the drain dan holds the key to my heart and he always will and i want to thank you now for all the ways you helped me sexy mom and big gay dad MnM my "little" sister 6ft tall, pretty and bugs me like a blister this is an look inside my mind of course there's a whole lot more but i think i'll leave it for YOU to guess 'cos i'll sound like a bore ~*~try reading it one breath it can be done!!!~*~ The road ahead is as long as you make it. Make it worth the trip ~*~jon bon jovi~*~ [This message has been edited by thedarkangel (edited 07-05-2001).] |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
it had some good thoughts and ideas...i didnt like how u capitalized certain words...it just didnt to help the poem at all... u can leave it, just an idea.. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
OOOooo I liked this one Laura. nice read.  |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is very interesting, Laura. I also didn't understand why you capitalized some words. I think you could do without that empahsis on those words. I didn't like this one as much as I have some others of yours. But thanks for sharing. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
laura, I liked the idea of this poem I liked the read too Some good thoughts in there thanks for sharing and keep it up hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
This was interesting. I dont think that anyone can accurately describe themselves done to the last detail in a poem, but you certainly did a good job of describing yourself anyway. *Amanda* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done here. I really liked the style of this one....I agree with the cobain line.bless him! I liked this one here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Definately interesting. I definately like!] Rhonda  "Amy, can you PLEASE come to Spain with us so that we have someone to keep Rhonda calm?" - Mr. Ardiel *insert hysterical laughter from me here* |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
different...this came across VERY interesting for me...and you think im krazy(well, i am)...but anyway!..in one breath?  ..nah, i think i'll pass..  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
I liked this... Interesting, and I can't completely understand it, but it's all good. Ha, one breath, yeah right. Want a bunch of dead people stuck in ur thread?!  That's what I thought. - Cody - |
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