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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
seeping into your pores inch by inch this trickle of pleasure outdoing all other sensations as this stream of pure bliss creeps so slowly over my skin taking my breath away and fogging my brain untill there is nothing but you and me holding on to this link between us that supports this magic enduring each other as we create a bliss that is nothing more than a whisp of a shadow stream “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” I know Im not perfect but I can smile & I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 07-03-2001).] |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Wow everything was expressed so nicely...strong feeling to it i liked it a lot! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this one tiff. I like the style you're recently writing in. Well done here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Great write Tiff! You chose your words wonderfully. Keep posting!  |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
wow!...you wrote this very nicely...beautiful job Tiff ...i liked it.im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This poem is beautiful, Tif. I really liked this style. The line breaks were placed perfectly. I read it over a few times, and the flow was awesome. I think the different phrases could be cut shorter, though. Lots of the lines running together like that create one big run-on. JMHO Nice work, though. I enjoyed this bunches --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is really excellent. I love it. Keep sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I liked this. It is like one long sentence, which is awesome. Thanks for the great read! *Amanda* |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Yeah tiff...another good one. I too liked the style of this. Awesome imagery... See ya 'round.~Carly Speak softly and carry a beagle. "Go outside and use your own eyes. You'll be surprised to see things you've never been taught" ~Edouard Manet [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 07-09-2001).] |
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