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-Queth-
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0 posted 2002-02-28 10:41 PM


A shadow danced upon the wind

It sighed within its honeyed tune

A flower blossomed in the aire

Reflected on a silver spoon.


A watching eye, with lashes long

Had dusted 'way her azure dreams

In light, a blinded hand did touch

A wayward ocean's bloody stream.


Moonlit streets played solitaire

Stones of red and black possessed

By dancing 'pon the trailing wind

A wandr'ing souless arabesque.


[Another piece based on abstract art and dance. Although old, in some way, it is one of my favorites. Enjoy at your leisure!]


Q.u.e.t.h.

Everything in between...


[This message has been edited by -Queth- (02-28-2002 10:46 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-03-01 12:22 PM


What a lovely poem and your meter and rhyme were right on, kudos this was great!

~* Imagination is more important than knowledge *~

Einstein


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2 posted 2002-03-01 05:40 PM



Queth-
This is excellent!
I love the way your mind works...very creative.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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3 posted 2002-03-02 09:41 AM


This was so beautiful!!! You certaintly do have a lot of talent

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

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4 posted 2002-03-02 12:46 PM


Lately I've been wondering when I would be able to have the pleasure to read another one of your poems..you do provoke my imagination and you have an amazing imagination yourself!! *sigh* mine kinda grew up along with me..my imagination goes  only as far as dreaming of white knights and dragons and such:P anyways, I could ramble on about how much I love your poem but I don't think I could ever stop!!

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5 posted 2002-03-02 07:20 PM


Hey, Q...this is yet another great peice from your wonderful mind! You never seem to have your poems linked to one specific thing...it's always variating! I like that! Well met!

Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth...

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6 posted 2002-03-02 07:29 PM


I really liked this poem. I thought you wrote it quite nicely. Your use of vocabulary is great, and I liked the style of it. The ryhme was wonderful and the meaning was deep. Well done. I loved it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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7 posted 2002-03-03 03:44 AM


ahh anything that has anything to do with dance im in love with this was beautiful...very deep

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8 posted 2002-03-03 05:03 PM


You have a wonderful rythmn and meter althrough this poem, although what really made it for me was the imagery, it is a very beautiful and descriptive language with fantastical (is that a word?) imagery that seemed to move with your rythmn and meter. Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece of poetry.

Zu

If you see this message I have just replied to your poem. I have poems as well *hint*

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