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Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2001-07-03 04:27 PM

Every morning,
the city
stretches its streets
to the limit
and yawning,
greets
the dimly lit
sunrise.

Without a splash,
hordes of clouds
plunge
and crash
on the stillness
of eyes
of the bottomless
puddles.

All across
the coast,
life is set in motion
in silence,
and sunrays,
like butterflies,
beat against
the half-closed
eyelids.

Waking up,
I can barely hear
the melody
of the birds
from forbidden orchards...
but you’re here
and life...
life,
again,
seems gorgeous!

Check out my poetry here:

http://www.unknownpoets.com/db/authors/master

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

1 posted 2001-07-03 07:31 PM

How did this get to page 2 without any replies. This poem is really,really good. I truthfully liked it alot. Very descriptive and I loved the ending. Great job
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-07-03 10:51 PM

I really like this one. The ending is so magical. Very well written here. I fully enjoyed this one.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-07-04 03:01 AM

ending was defintly had...a touch of magical to it...i enjoyed the read...great job!

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

4 posted 2001-07-04 03:06 PM

I love your writing so much.
Yet another great write from you.
The description was superb.

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-07-04 10:47 PM

I really like the stucture of this poem. The way you chose the line breaks were awesome. I really enjoyed this.. beautiful words. The imagery is awesome, and the ending was fantastic. Very nice message. Wonderful work.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-07-09 09:32 PM

Your ending show such class in your writing. I loved it and would love to see more. Keep sharing.

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Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

7 posted 2001-07-09 10:58 PM

Gret job! I like the descriptions in here!
Rhonda

"Amy, can you PLEASE come to Spain with us so that we have someone to keep Rhonda calm?" - Mr. Ardiel *insert hysterical laughter from me here*

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