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Jessica
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0 posted 2001-07-01 11:03 PM


10:14 PM
I wrote this one night when I was half asleep... So it's not my best...  


6/5/01                          Jessica
  
The  colors of our love paint a magnificent portrait
Filling every empty space of paper with yerning desires
Wanting the slightest feeling to be noticed,
We add brilliant shades of red to accent our emotion.
The dark shadows on the wall remind me of your beautiful soul
Delicate & true, but yet still untouchable
Cherished thoughts bring dreams of the future
You can't hide what you feel, you can't touch what you know
We have to stay strong, to finish what we've started
We cannot part, our hopes have now combined
I will love you always... My heart says this is true
As long as you care, there will not be a doubt in the world
You & I can only grow together now
Leaving our shattered pasts behind
Starting something precious & new
You have a friend in me, I will never let you down
Nor forsake you & abandon you in an ocean of sorrow
My doors are always open to you...
No matter the place or time
You have captured me & taken me whole
Through the eyes I have never seen
Through the touch I have never felt
& through every thought that comes dancing into my mind
This I just felt you should know
& I hope you take my words close & dear to you heart...
Just as I have done your's... I love you...



What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

[This message has been edited by Jessica (edited 07-02-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-07-02 12:18 PM


Wow Jessica...
I thoroughly enjoyed this.
It was absolutely beautiful.
Just beautiful.
You do great at free verse.
Keep posting.  

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2 posted 2001-07-02 12:54 PM


This is beautiful! The greatest verse I've written is half asleep!
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3 posted 2001-07-02 07:09 PM


This poem rocks!  Your words are very beautiful, Jessica.  This is such a sweet poem, and deserving of what you obviously have with this person.  The line that really stuck out for me was, "You can't hide what you feel, you can't touch what you know" <- that line's awesome.. really got me thinking.  You really did a wonderful job with the imagery, and the descriptive language.  Excellent work.  I really enjoyed this.  I hope to see more soon  

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

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4 posted 2001-07-02 11:22 PM


awesome job on writing this...very well done!...this was just beauftiufl...so much beautty in teh words you wrote here...and i REALLY liked this poem in every verse i was reading ...hope to see more...bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Jessica
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5 posted 2001-07-03 02:56 AM


Thanks everybody...
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6 posted 2001-07-03 10:46 PM


Awesome job here. I really enjoyed this poem Jessica.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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7 posted 2001-07-05 08:04 PM


"You can't hide what you feel, you can't touch what you know"

This is so beautiful
OMG, This person must really be very special
~*stands up and applauds*~
this is totally amazing
great job Jessica

"My doors are always open to you...
No matter the place or time
You have captured me & taken me whole
Through the eyes I have never seen
Through the touch I have never felt
& through every thought that comes dancing into my mind
This I just felt you should know
& I hope you take my words close & dear to you heart...
Just as I have done your's... I love you..."


I love this ending
has a strong kick to it
keep sharing



hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

[This message has been edited by acire (edited 07-05-2001).]

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8 posted 2001-07-05 08:07 PM


sorry for the second post...have to add it to my library  

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare

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