»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #5
»
Just Like That
| Teen Poetry #5 |
|
Just Like That |
|
|
fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia 
|
Just like That Remember how [it]happened The raining (which was shining) s u under a yellow n n balloon i n g whenithappened whenithappened Just Like This pulse pOuNdInG heart StOmPiNg "Winds go ride To soar side by side How the winds blow Lie in what, i don't know" How it happened quite a Surprize (reflected in mine eyes just like that) "This is cactus land!!!"-T.S.Eliot |
||
| © Copyright 2001 Sean Michael DeFlora - All Rights Reserved | |||
anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked the poem...and i love your format...its gives your own uniquness...great job!...bye  im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
||
|
Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I agree with albert. The format was awesome. It added great effects. Keep posting great poetry! *Amanda* |
||
|
Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
What is it with poeple and their crazy formats lately? I'm loving it. This is a great piece! Keep posting!  [This message has been edited by Spice (edited 07-02-2001).] |
||
|
Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Fozzy, the ending....awesome. I am so impressed with this one. SO IMPRESSED. The ending.....BOOM hit me off my chair. I really loved this poem. Awesome job man.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
||
|
angel_2401 Member
since 2001-06-12
Posts 131Cincinnati, OH |
I like this format! Also, it is very well written. I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem. |
||
|
Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is one of the best poems I have read here. The style was FANTASTIC, and the content was genius! This is a library piece. You are such a talented poet! I love all of your work.. you rock, Foz! Wonderful job. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
||
|
DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
very well done if i may add. brilliant format, i absolutly love how everyone's branching out and writing awesome pieces like this. prime example of extending your knowledge..keep it up this was great *dq **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
||
|
pharon Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251alabama |
ok....can i just say...rock on!! i love the way you wrote this, infact, i appreciate nearly all of your work!! (then again i am one to admire those who think outside the box) mr |
||
|
Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
this poem is nice I can feel what your talking about |
||
|
Acies
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
very interesting format A little confusing at first but when read again it makes good sense thanks for sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
||
|
~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
i don't think i cared for the format. i like the words but it took me a WHILE to read it with the crazy format. next time i would advise not to use it *L* it made it hard to read... i dunno... maybe it's just me LOL Valerie "...And i want to take you down, but your soul could not be found, doesn't matter much you see cause your disease is killing me..." -Saliva |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
